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Nominator: Pokelego999 ( talk · contribs)
Reviewer: QuicoleJR ( talk · contribs) 15:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
I will take this review. Expect comments in a few hours, ping me if I forget about it.
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talk) 15:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
@ Pokelego999: Sorry for the wait. Here's the review:
Mew's first film appearance was in Pokémon: The First Movie as one of the side characters alongside Mewtwo.The Appearances section says that Mew is one of the main characters. Which one is it?
who conceived the idea of an elusive, phantom-like Pokémon from games like Xevious and Space Invaders, specifically in the form of rumors that existed for those games.What does this mean?
but Sugimori was unable to make time due to the game's close release.I'm not sure why, but “close release” just sounds wrong. Maybe try something like “approaching release date” or “due to the game nearing its release date” instead.
He disliked the fetus-like aspects of Mew's design and revised the design into its modern-day appearance.This is the first time you mention any fetus-like aspects. Were they in the original concept art, the in-game sprite, or something else entirely?
Its DNA combines the genetic composition of all existing Pokémon speciesDoes this mean its DNA has the DNA of all other Pokémon in it, or does it mean something else?
Due to its balanced statistics and vast move pool, Mew is regarded as one of the strongest Pokémon in Red, Blue, and Yellow.“Balanced” in this context typically means that it is similar in power to other options, as opposed to being overpowered or underpowered. Considering that you call it one of the strongest Pokémon in the game in the same sentence, I doubt that this is the meaning you intended.
Mew is mentioned in a diary entry in Cinnabar Mansion,The previous section says it is a journal, which makes more sense considering the scientific background. I know they are basically synonyms in this context, but I think the article should be consistent.
Mew received a special "Z-Crystal" item,This kind of implies that it was given directly to Mew. Maybe “A special “Z-Crystal” item was created for Mew” would work a little better?
Mew's role was cited as a source of its appeal.Mew’s role as what?
Unlike the other Pokémon from the first generation of the Pokémon franchise,Some people who aren't fans of the series might not understand what “generation” means here. This comes up throughout the section, so it might be easier to explain that it refers to Pokémon Red and Blue than to reword it.
It was believed to be long-extinct and "the legendary and rare 'most powerful Pokémon ever'".Why is “most powerful Pokémon ever” in quotation marks within a larger quote?
Mew's role in the games and as part of its dynamic was cited as a source of its appeal.I don't understand what “as part of its dynamic” is supposed to mean here.
Mew ( Japanese: ミュウ, Hepburn: Myū) is one of the fictional species from the Pokémon franchise.This sentence has improper grammar.
It is a small, pink, Psychic-type Mythical Pokémon.Obviously I know the answer to this, since I've played the games, but you really should explain what a Mythical Pokémon is. For comparison, the GA Mewtwo explains what a Legendary Pokémon is in the lead, and Legendary is more widely known than Mythical.
Mew could not be obtained legitimately in the games except through some specific Pokémon distribution events or glitching.Is glitching really a legitimate method? The Appearances section of the article seems to disagree.
The movie revealed that a fossilized Mew eyelash, found in the Guyana jungle by a team of scientists, was used to create Mewtwo, a genetically enhanced Mew clone.Is this movie considered canon for the game series? Also, I feel like mentioning the Guyana part is unnecessary for the lead.
Unlike the older characters in the Pokémon franchise,Older how? Mew was introduced in the first game.
which Tajiri deemed to be something exciting for players.This just doesn't sound right to me. Maybe try
which Tajiri considered exciting for players.or something like that.
Mew was added at the very end of the development of Pokémon Red and Blue after the debug features were removed, freeing up just enough space to add the character despite being told not to alter the game any further at this point.Who added Mew, and who told them not to?
It was designed as a simpler version of Mewtwo so Mew would take up less space in the game's data.How would that make it take up less space in the data?
Mew's movements in the first movie were primarily created by the anime animators,Wasn't it an anime movie, using the anime characters? Who else would draw it?
who were working off the design depicted in its in-game sprite.I think you can cut “the design depicted in” and not change the meaning of the sentence.
the game states that scientists within the game view it as being the single ancestor of all other Pokémon.“The game states” and “within the game” are not both needed.
It is a Mythical Pokémon,Like I said earlier, you need to explain what this means.
and it is the last of the first-generation Pokémon.In what way?
In the video games, it is possible for Mew to learn any move that can be taught via special tutoring.Special tutoring is too vague.
It can also "transform" into other Pokémon.How? Also, why is “transform” in quotation marks?
referencing that Mew is in Guyana.So far, the article has only said that they found it in Guyana. Is it still in Guyana?
For a time, Mew could only be legitimately obtained in the Pokémon video games via Nintendo promotional event distributions.“For a time” is way too vague. Maybe try “When it was introduced,” or something along those lines.
Players can obtain it by buying a Poke Ball Plus, which contains a Mew inside of it that can be sent into Pokémon: Let's Go, Pikachu! and Let's Go, Eevee! or Pokémon Sword and Shield.Unsourced.
When sent out, it flies away from the stage, usually dropping rare items as it does so.The source does not support this claim.
though in the Japanese version of the film, Mew was depicted as a cruel being who wished to destroy Mewtwo and its clones.The source says that this was cut content and not a localization change.
Mew later appears in Pokémon: Lucario and the Mystery of Mew where it is intrinsically tied to the mysterious Tree of Beginning and kidnaps Pikachu to play with it.How is it tied to this tree? It kidnaps Pikachu to play with what? I haven't seen the movie, so I don't know the answers to these questions.
Ever since that encounter, Goh's goal was to capture Mew.It's fine if the answer to this one is no, but is it possible to describe the nature of the encounter? As it is, I have no idea what happened past the fact that he saw Mew.
and Red and the character Green join forces to avoid it being captured.Is it unusual for these characters to work together at that point in the book? I know the answer, but most readers won't.
and distributed the first cards of it for the card game as free giveaways,You should say and link Pokémon Trading Card Game here, since this is the first time you mention it.
Due to the success of the experiment on April 15, 1996, Game Freak announced a contestWas that date for the experiment or the announcement?
Mew's existence led to rampant rumors on its existence,Redundant.
ranging from methods on how to obtain itAlready covered in more detail above.
such as those in Pikachu's Global Adventure: The Rise and Fall of PokémonWhat is Pikachu’s Global Adventure? Is it a study, a book of studies, or something else entirely? I can't really tell.
its role as a source of appeal for the characterWhich character?
Picking some random sources:
Since I only found issues with two of the sources I checked, I would say that this article passes the spot check.
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Nominator: Pokelego999 ( talk · contribs)
Reviewer: QuicoleJR ( talk · contribs) 15:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
I will take this review. Expect comments in a few hours, ping me if I forget about it.
QuicoleJR (
talk) 15:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
@ Pokelego999: Sorry for the wait. Here's the review:
Mew's first film appearance was in Pokémon: The First Movie as one of the side characters alongside Mewtwo.The Appearances section says that Mew is one of the main characters. Which one is it?
who conceived the idea of an elusive, phantom-like Pokémon from games like Xevious and Space Invaders, specifically in the form of rumors that existed for those games.What does this mean?
but Sugimori was unable to make time due to the game's close release.I'm not sure why, but “close release” just sounds wrong. Maybe try something like “approaching release date” or “due to the game nearing its release date” instead.
He disliked the fetus-like aspects of Mew's design and revised the design into its modern-day appearance.This is the first time you mention any fetus-like aspects. Were they in the original concept art, the in-game sprite, or something else entirely?
Its DNA combines the genetic composition of all existing Pokémon speciesDoes this mean its DNA has the DNA of all other Pokémon in it, or does it mean something else?
Due to its balanced statistics and vast move pool, Mew is regarded as one of the strongest Pokémon in Red, Blue, and Yellow.“Balanced” in this context typically means that it is similar in power to other options, as opposed to being overpowered or underpowered. Considering that you call it one of the strongest Pokémon in the game in the same sentence, I doubt that this is the meaning you intended.
Mew is mentioned in a diary entry in Cinnabar Mansion,The previous section says it is a journal, which makes more sense considering the scientific background. I know they are basically synonyms in this context, but I think the article should be consistent.
Mew received a special "Z-Crystal" item,This kind of implies that it was given directly to Mew. Maybe “A special “Z-Crystal” item was created for Mew” would work a little better?
Mew's role was cited as a source of its appeal.Mew’s role as what?
Unlike the other Pokémon from the first generation of the Pokémon franchise,Some people who aren't fans of the series might not understand what “generation” means here. This comes up throughout the section, so it might be easier to explain that it refers to Pokémon Red and Blue than to reword it.
It was believed to be long-extinct and "the legendary and rare 'most powerful Pokémon ever'".Why is “most powerful Pokémon ever” in quotation marks within a larger quote?
Mew's role in the games and as part of its dynamic was cited as a source of its appeal.I don't understand what “as part of its dynamic” is supposed to mean here.
Mew ( Japanese: ミュウ, Hepburn: Myū) is one of the fictional species from the Pokémon franchise.This sentence has improper grammar.
It is a small, pink, Psychic-type Mythical Pokémon.Obviously I know the answer to this, since I've played the games, but you really should explain what a Mythical Pokémon is. For comparison, the GA Mewtwo explains what a Legendary Pokémon is in the lead, and Legendary is more widely known than Mythical.
Mew could not be obtained legitimately in the games except through some specific Pokémon distribution events or glitching.Is glitching really a legitimate method? The Appearances section of the article seems to disagree.
The movie revealed that a fossilized Mew eyelash, found in the Guyana jungle by a team of scientists, was used to create Mewtwo, a genetically enhanced Mew clone.Is this movie considered canon for the game series? Also, I feel like mentioning the Guyana part is unnecessary for the lead.
Unlike the older characters in the Pokémon franchise,Older how? Mew was introduced in the first game.
which Tajiri deemed to be something exciting for players.This just doesn't sound right to me. Maybe try
which Tajiri considered exciting for players.or something like that.
Mew was added at the very end of the development of Pokémon Red and Blue after the debug features were removed, freeing up just enough space to add the character despite being told not to alter the game any further at this point.Who added Mew, and who told them not to?
It was designed as a simpler version of Mewtwo so Mew would take up less space in the game's data.How would that make it take up less space in the data?
Mew's movements in the first movie were primarily created by the anime animators,Wasn't it an anime movie, using the anime characters? Who else would draw it?
who were working off the design depicted in its in-game sprite.I think you can cut “the design depicted in” and not change the meaning of the sentence.
the game states that scientists within the game view it as being the single ancestor of all other Pokémon.“The game states” and “within the game” are not both needed.
It is a Mythical Pokémon,Like I said earlier, you need to explain what this means.
and it is the last of the first-generation Pokémon.In what way?
In the video games, it is possible for Mew to learn any move that can be taught via special tutoring.Special tutoring is too vague.
It can also "transform" into other Pokémon.How? Also, why is “transform” in quotation marks?
referencing that Mew is in Guyana.So far, the article has only said that they found it in Guyana. Is it still in Guyana?
For a time, Mew could only be legitimately obtained in the Pokémon video games via Nintendo promotional event distributions.“For a time” is way too vague. Maybe try “When it was introduced,” or something along those lines.
Players can obtain it by buying a Poke Ball Plus, which contains a Mew inside of it that can be sent into Pokémon: Let's Go, Pikachu! and Let's Go, Eevee! or Pokémon Sword and Shield.Unsourced.
When sent out, it flies away from the stage, usually dropping rare items as it does so.The source does not support this claim.
though in the Japanese version of the film, Mew was depicted as a cruel being who wished to destroy Mewtwo and its clones.The source says that this was cut content and not a localization change.
Mew later appears in Pokémon: Lucario and the Mystery of Mew where it is intrinsically tied to the mysterious Tree of Beginning and kidnaps Pikachu to play with it.How is it tied to this tree? It kidnaps Pikachu to play with what? I haven't seen the movie, so I don't know the answers to these questions.
Ever since that encounter, Goh's goal was to capture Mew.It's fine if the answer to this one is no, but is it possible to describe the nature of the encounter? As it is, I have no idea what happened past the fact that he saw Mew.
and Red and the character Green join forces to avoid it being captured.Is it unusual for these characters to work together at that point in the book? I know the answer, but most readers won't.
and distributed the first cards of it for the card game as free giveaways,You should say and link Pokémon Trading Card Game here, since this is the first time you mention it.
Due to the success of the experiment on April 15, 1996, Game Freak announced a contestWas that date for the experiment or the announcement?
Mew's existence led to rampant rumors on its existence,Redundant.
ranging from methods on how to obtain itAlready covered in more detail above.
such as those in Pikachu's Global Adventure: The Rise and Fall of PokémonWhat is Pikachu’s Global Adventure? Is it a study, a book of studies, or something else entirely? I can't really tell.
its role as a source of appeal for the characterWhich character?
Picking some random sources:
Since I only found issues with two of the sources I checked, I would say that this article passes the spot check.