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Reviewer: Extraordinary Writ ( talk · contribs) 07:57, 23 March 2023 (UTC)
Happy to take a look. At a glance I've not seeing any serious issues, so my comments should be fairly minor (and if any of them don't seem helpful, feel free to say so).
and Robert Christian, a wealthy planter. that was well connected with the nation's political elite— something seems to be missing here.
Tyler only made one public appearance as first lady– any further details?
More to come. Extraordinary Writ ( talk) 07:57, 23 March 2023 (UTC)
she came from an Episcopalian family– perhaps mention explicitly (here or somewhere else) that Tyler was herself a devout Episcopalian.
Distinguished visitors to the White House sometimes went upstairs to meet her, and Charles Dickens and Washington Irving paid her visits– the way this is structured implies that Dickens and Irving were separate from the distinguished visitors to the White House. What about "Charles Dickens, Washington Irving, and other prominent figures went upstairs to meet her during their visits to the White House" or something like that?
More later. Extraordinary Writ ( talk) 00:47, 24 March 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Extraordinary Writ ( talk · contribs) 07:57, 23 March 2023 (UTC)
Happy to take a look. At a glance I've not seeing any serious issues, so my comments should be fairly minor (and if any of them don't seem helpful, feel free to say so).
and Robert Christian, a wealthy planter. that was well connected with the nation's political elite— something seems to be missing here.
Tyler only made one public appearance as first lady– any further details?
More to come. Extraordinary Writ ( talk) 07:57, 23 March 2023 (UTC)
she came from an Episcopalian family– perhaps mention explicitly (here or somewhere else) that Tyler was herself a devout Episcopalian.
Distinguished visitors to the White House sometimes went upstairs to meet her, and Charles Dickens and Washington Irving paid her visits– the way this is structured implies that Dickens and Irving were separate from the distinguished visitors to the White House. What about "Charles Dickens, Washington Irving, and other prominent figures went upstairs to meet her during their visits to the White House" or something like that?
More later. Extraordinary Writ ( talk) 00:47, 24 March 2023 (UTC)