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Images are all relevant, with suitable captions, though just "Ortega in 20xx" may be slightly too brief. (No alt text, but that's not required for GA.) Images all claim to have a Creative Commons license.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Early life
"Ortega stated rejections motivated her" to "Ortega stated that rejections motivated her"
Done
Lead
Oxford comma suggested before the "and" in "for which she received nominations at the Golden Globe, Primetime Emmy and Screen Actors Guild Awards"
Done
2012–2017
No comma needed after "Ortega made her acting debut in the sitcom Rob (2012)".
Removed
2018–2021
"Ortega led the high-school drama film" needs clarifying I think.
Could you clarify on what needs clarifying??
Question: Led in what way, as in directed/produced/lead cast member, etc. -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 13:20, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Revised
2022–present
Oxford comma suggested before the "and" in "style of speaking and facial expressions"
Done
Is "the" needed in "episode of the NBC's sketch comedy series"?
Removed
Upcoming projects
Change "Ortega is set to star" to "Ortega is set to star in"
Done
Needs a comma after "a dark comedy co-starring Paul Rudd"
Done
Is "attached" the right word in "Ortega is attached to star in Alba"?
I believe it's correct, but probably not the most encyclopaedic, so I've replaced it
Influences
"She also admired Fanning's sister Elle and followed both of their careers as a child." should have commas either side of "Elle".
Done
Role choices
"more-varied" doesn't need a hyphen.
Removed
Change "in 2021 she did not want" to "in 2021 that she did not want".
Done
Personal life
"more-challenging doesn't need a hyphen.
Removed
General
There's a few instances of quotes following a colon where I'd have used a comma.
I believe that's just a matter of style and is grammatically correct.
Pamzeis (
talk) 01:06, 19 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I do want to note these are all minor, and not essential to achieve GA. -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 19:44, 18 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Sourcing check
Glancing at the sources they look okay overall. Sampling 24 randomly (which I think is more than enough):
13 - interview, but that's fine
18 - this is for Iron Man 3 - but is it your interpretion of it that it's "successful at the box office"? (I personally agree it was successful though, and ref 20 backs it up.)
I've removed this bit entirely, as it's not really relevant to Ortega's career
23 - ok
25 - ok
29 - ok
33 - ok
45 - ok
48 - is "craves more independence from her parents" enough to say "stubborn" in the article?
120 - self-published by
Ty Burr, but I think that's ok in this case.
129 - ok
180 - ok
181 - ok
194 - ok
197 - ok
200 - ok
202 - ok
210 - ok
Pamzeis, All my comments are very minor really, so I have to say well done for this overall! I've give you chance to respond to things before, but I think it's almost ready to be marked as GA. -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 13:44, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
@
Kj cheetham: Thanks for your comments :) I've responded to the above.
Pamzeis (
talk) 14:48, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
All good to me now, good work! -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 14:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Images are all relevant, with suitable captions, though just "Ortega in 20xx" may be slightly too brief. (No alt text, but that's not required for GA.) Images all claim to have a Creative Commons license.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Early life
"Ortega stated rejections motivated her" to "Ortega stated that rejections motivated her"
Done
Lead
Oxford comma suggested before the "and" in "for which she received nominations at the Golden Globe, Primetime Emmy and Screen Actors Guild Awards"
Done
2012–2017
No comma needed after "Ortega made her acting debut in the sitcom Rob (2012)".
Removed
2018–2021
"Ortega led the high-school drama film" needs clarifying I think.
Could you clarify on what needs clarifying??
Question: Led in what way, as in directed/produced/lead cast member, etc. -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 13:20, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Revised
2022–present
Oxford comma suggested before the "and" in "style of speaking and facial expressions"
Done
Is "the" needed in "episode of the NBC's sketch comedy series"?
Removed
Upcoming projects
Change "Ortega is set to star" to "Ortega is set to star in"
Done
Needs a comma after "a dark comedy co-starring Paul Rudd"
Done
Is "attached" the right word in "Ortega is attached to star in Alba"?
I believe it's correct, but probably not the most encyclopaedic, so I've replaced it
Influences
"She also admired Fanning's sister Elle and followed both of their careers as a child." should have commas either side of "Elle".
Done
Role choices
"more-varied" doesn't need a hyphen.
Removed
Change "in 2021 she did not want" to "in 2021 that she did not want".
Done
Personal life
"more-challenging doesn't need a hyphen.
Removed
General
There's a few instances of quotes following a colon where I'd have used a comma.
I believe that's just a matter of style and is grammatically correct.
Pamzeis (
talk) 01:06, 19 March 2024 (UTC)reply
I do want to note these are all minor, and not essential to achieve GA. -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 19:44, 18 March 2024 (UTC)reply
Sourcing check
Glancing at the sources they look okay overall. Sampling 24 randomly (which I think is more than enough):
13 - interview, but that's fine
18 - this is for Iron Man 3 - but is it your interpretion of it that it's "successful at the box office"? (I personally agree it was successful though, and ref 20 backs it up.)
I've removed this bit entirely, as it's not really relevant to Ortega's career
23 - ok
25 - ok
29 - ok
33 - ok
45 - ok
48 - is "craves more independence from her parents" enough to say "stubborn" in the article?
120 - self-published by
Ty Burr, but I think that's ok in this case.
129 - ok
180 - ok
181 - ok
194 - ok
197 - ok
200 - ok
202 - ok
210 - ok
Pamzeis, All my comments are very minor really, so I have to say well done for this overall! I've give you chance to respond to things before, but I think it's almost ready to be marked as GA. -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 13:44, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
@
Kj cheetham: Thanks for your comments :) I've responded to the above.
Pamzeis (
talk) 14:48, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
All good to me now, good work! -
Kj cheetham (
talk) 14:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.