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Reviewer: Lemonade51 ( talk · contribs) 18:47, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

Lead

• "In this episode, Having been..." lower caps on having

  Done.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

• "...for ten years, a little boy mysteriously reappears, but has not aged one bit after having been kidnapped for ten years" tad repetitive. I suggest you rephrase it.

  Changed.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

Plot

• "His brother and father clearly don’t like...", avoid contractions

  Changed.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

• There are several cases where you have introduced characters full names and continue to do so: "While the Underwoods argue about returned Billy Underwood...", "He believes Ronald Purnell, a delinquent", then a line later, "Doggett questions Ronald Purnell outside" As you have introduced them before, it is fine to use his last name thereafter.

  Changed.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

• Plural of Underwoods is Underwoods': "When the Underwoods comply...", "While the Underwoods argue" → "When the Underwoods' comply", "While the Underwoods' argue"

  I didn't change this, because their last name is Underwood, without the "s", so the plural would be "Underwoods".-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

  • • Whoops, my mistake. Lemonade51 ( talk) 21:35, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

Production

• "A majority of the episode was filmed in Pasadena, California." needs source

  Also didn't change this, because the reference after the next sentence, the "Fraga" one, is citing both.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

• "Doggett is told be a psychic", told by a psychic?

  I'm not sure what you meant here.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

  • Should it be 'told by' instead of 'told be'? Lemonade51 ( talk) 21:35, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply
• "the song of John", son?

  Changed.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

Reception

• "gave the episode 6 out of 10 and called the episode" → "gave the episode 6 out of 10 and called it"

  Changed.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

No problems with sourcing or imaging. On hold. -- Lemonade51 ( talk) 18:47, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

Thank you for the review. I changed most of the issues, although there were a few I was fuzzy on.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 20:44, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply

Alright, I fixed everything.-- Gen. Quon ( talk) 21:37, 15 June 2012 (UTC) reply