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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski ( talk · contribs) 11:37, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for
GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
- Thank you for the quick yet thorough review! Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 15:59, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
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- Lede seems a little shy on some info, could we get the lede to cover a bit more about the person - it doesn't really mention anything from the early life section.
- Added information on profession and work in the agriculture sector. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- There's a few jargon words, which even though they are linked are still confusing. plurinominal for example leads to a language article and doesn't explain what it is really. Is there not a less jargon way to say this? Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:25, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- It's a bit of difficult term. Plurinominal refers to deputies elected via electoral list (as opposed to running in a district). The decision to link to Wiktionary was really the best solution I and another reviewer could come up with during a separate GA nomination. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
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- If she is Bolivian, why was she born in Brazil? Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Unclear. All sources gave me Sao Paulo but not why that city. Given that she was born in the 1970s ( Banzer dictatorship) and her family had some prominent leftists, I'd assume they were in exile at the time, which isn't uncommon for many Bolivian political leaders. However, without any source on the matter, I couldn't really expand upon it. Her Bolivian citizenship can be confirmed simply by the fact that she holds public office. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- You don't need to acronym things that aren't used later - see CORDECRUZ, MIR, etc. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Many of the sources I used only include the acronym, so I kept them as an aide to those that follow the citation and may not be familiar with the party/company/etc's full name. I could still remove them though, if you'd like. Krisgabwoosh ( talk)
01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- If you don't mind. The acronym of the item is only relevant if we are going to call it several times. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 21:37, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Fair enough, removed. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 23:14, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Pretty sure it's "Dean" with a capital. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- General grammatical rules are not to capitalize when a title is included as part of a description following the name. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Same for University Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Where? Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- ed her to work as a university professor Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 21:37, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- The word university in general is not capitalized unless referring to the name of a specific university. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 23:14, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Have we not got any additional images for this article? Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Only poor quality screen grabs from Creative Commons news sources. 1 2 3. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
Review meta comments
- I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 11:37, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski ( talk · contribs) 11:37, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for
GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
- Thank you for the quick yet thorough review! Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 15:59, 12 August 2022 (UTC)
Links
Prose
Lede
- Lede seems a little shy on some info, could we get the lede to cover a bit more about the person - it doesn't really mention anything from the early life section.
- Added information on profession and work in the agriculture sector. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- There's a few jargon words, which even though they are linked are still confusing. plurinominal for example leads to a language article and doesn't explain what it is really. Is there not a less jargon way to say this? Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:25, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- It's a bit of difficult term. Plurinominal refers to deputies elected via electoral list (as opposed to running in a district). The decision to link to Wiktionary was really the best solution I and another reviewer could come up with during a separate GA nomination. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
General
- If she is Bolivian, why was she born in Brazil? Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Unclear. All sources gave me Sao Paulo but not why that city. Given that she was born in the 1970s ( Banzer dictatorship) and her family had some prominent leftists, I'd assume they were in exile at the time, which isn't uncommon for many Bolivian political leaders. However, without any source on the matter, I couldn't really expand upon it. Her Bolivian citizenship can be confirmed simply by the fact that she holds public office. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- You don't need to acronym things that aren't used later - see CORDECRUZ, MIR, etc. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Many of the sources I used only include the acronym, so I kept them as an aide to those that follow the citation and may not be familiar with the party/company/etc's full name. I could still remove them though, if you'd like. Krisgabwoosh ( talk)
01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- If you don't mind. The acronym of the item is only relevant if we are going to call it several times. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 21:37, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Fair enough, removed. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 23:14, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Pretty sure it's "Dean" with a capital. Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- General grammatical rules are not to capitalize when a title is included as part of a description following the name. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Same for University Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Where? Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- ed her to work as a university professor Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 21:37, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- The word university in general is not capitalized unless referring to the name of a specific university. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 23:14, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
- Have we not got any additional images for this article? Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 20:31, 10 August 2022 (UTC)
- Only poor quality screen grabs from Creative Commons news sources. 1 2 3. Krisgabwoosh ( talk) 01:48, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
Review meta comments
- I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) Lee Vilenski ( talk • contribs) 11:37, 10 August 2022 (UTC)