A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
There are some minor changes that need to be made. I will place the review on hold for seven days, awaiting further improvements. Adabow(
complain) 10:48, 16 July 2010 (UTC)reply
Is it well written?
Lead: link
Kelly Rowland (album) to 'third studio album', otherwise someone might think self-titled links to a page about self-titling things
Done
...top ten in the UK and top twenty Ireland...in Ireland, maybe?
Done
'Music and lyrics' section: similar to his productions "Sexy Bitch" and "Boom Boom Pow".Thoughnear the end... Starting a sentence with 'though' seems gramatically incorrect (and if not, sounds awkard). Maybe start with "However, near the end..."?
Done
'Themes' section: new section; mention Rowland's name again, rather than 'she'
Quote from Rap Up: "...[Kelly's] stretching her legs out and she's..". Either use "she's" (direct from quote), or "Rowland is", rather than "Kelly's"
Done
'Release' section: ..in New York that shechoosethis song..." maybe chose (past tense)?
Done
'Chart performance' section: '..."Commander" made it U.S. chart debut...' → made its
"On May 28, 2010 and After six weeks on the UK charts it peaked at number two on the dance chart[54] and nine on the official singles chart[55] a week ahead of the release of its remix EP" this is slightly confusing and probably should be reworded.
"Since official release the video has received critical acclaim with over two million Vevo views." this needs an 'as of' or similar
Done
References
For charts you need to find permanent references - for some charts (at least New Zealand and Australia) you need to use the Hung Medien source (ie
[1] and
[2]
✗Not done, The single only reached 64 in Australia and unfortunatly Australian-charts.com only archives positions 1-50. The ONLY source which archives positions above 50 is panadora.nla.gov. Rather than use Pandora (which takes several weeks to update) I've archived the ChartiFacts page instead. As soon as pandora updates and uploads the new pdf's then I will change to pandora. Also for New Zealand I've used {{singlechart}} and per
WP:record charts once single chart is used it should not be replaced, also for consistancy. If you wish I'll add
[3] as an additional source? --
Lil-unique1 (
talk) 15:37, 16 July 2010 (UTC)reply
That's not true. ARIA Charts publishes only the top 50 to the viewing public. The rest must be obtained by subscription. But as shown here
Ariacharts.com/faqs the chart goes up to 100. This is the chartifacts page
here which in effect is a publishment of the top chart achievements that week. its been manually archived using WebCite. The only other place this is available is at the National Archives of Australia who do actually digitally archive the ARIA CHARTS report for which I can link to for the week in question. This is the ARIA Chart report
here. If you prefer I could add this as a link. --
Lil-unique1 (
talk) 00:11, 17 July 2010 (UTC)reply
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
There are some minor changes that need to be made. I will place the review on hold for seven days, awaiting further improvements. Adabow(
complain) 10:48, 16 July 2010 (UTC)reply
Is it well written?
Lead: link
Kelly Rowland (album) to 'third studio album', otherwise someone might think self-titled links to a page about self-titling things
Done
...top ten in the UK and top twenty Ireland...in Ireland, maybe?
Done
'Music and lyrics' section: similar to his productions "Sexy Bitch" and "Boom Boom Pow".Thoughnear the end... Starting a sentence with 'though' seems gramatically incorrect (and if not, sounds awkard). Maybe start with "However, near the end..."?
Done
'Themes' section: new section; mention Rowland's name again, rather than 'she'
Quote from Rap Up: "...[Kelly's] stretching her legs out and she's..". Either use "she's" (direct from quote), or "Rowland is", rather than "Kelly's"
Done
'Release' section: ..in New York that shechoosethis song..." maybe chose (past tense)?
Done
'Chart performance' section: '..."Commander" made it U.S. chart debut...' → made its
"On May 28, 2010 and After six weeks on the UK charts it peaked at number two on the dance chart[54] and nine on the official singles chart[55] a week ahead of the release of its remix EP" this is slightly confusing and probably should be reworded.
"Since official release the video has received critical acclaim with over two million Vevo views." this needs an 'as of' or similar
Done
References
For charts you need to find permanent references - for some charts (at least New Zealand and Australia) you need to use the Hung Medien source (ie
[1] and
[2]
✗Not done, The single only reached 64 in Australia and unfortunatly Australian-charts.com only archives positions 1-50. The ONLY source which archives positions above 50 is panadora.nla.gov. Rather than use Pandora (which takes several weeks to update) I've archived the ChartiFacts page instead. As soon as pandora updates and uploads the new pdf's then I will change to pandora. Also for New Zealand I've used {{singlechart}} and per
WP:record charts once single chart is used it should not be replaced, also for consistancy. If you wish I'll add
[3] as an additional source? --
Lil-unique1 (
talk) 15:37, 16 July 2010 (UTC)reply
That's not true. ARIA Charts publishes only the top 50 to the viewing public. The rest must be obtained by subscription. But as shown here
Ariacharts.com/faqs the chart goes up to 100. This is the chartifacts page
here which in effect is a publishment of the top chart achievements that week. its been manually archived using WebCite. The only other place this is available is at the National Archives of Australia who do actually digitally archive the ARIA CHARTS report for which I can link to for the week in question. This is the ARIA Chart report
here. If you prefer I could add this as a link. --
Lil-unique1 (
talk) 00:11, 17 July 2010 (UTC)reply