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Nominator: Fieryninja ( talk · contribs)
Reviewer: Spinixster ( talk · contribs) 03:00, 27 March 2024 (UTC)
Let's talk about Bruno. Or, in other words, I'll be reviewing this article. Comments will be coming soon (hopefully), in the meantime, I'll go over the basics:
Okay, here's the full review.
Following the release of the film, Bruno achieved viral popularity.Where did Bruno achieve viral popularity?
After finishing their work on Zootopia (2016),...
Charise Castro Smith, Bush and Howard co-directed the film.This sentence feels out of place in a paragraph talking about the writing of the film. Perhaps some context on how the directors took part in the writing of the film could help?
According to Bush the team conducted research by consulting therapists and psychologists:...Add comma after Bush.
Alejandra Espinosa was the local guide for Disney on a four-day tour of Barichara, after which she was contracted as cultural consultant.Add "a" before "cultural consultant".
A team of ten Disney staff including Latin American employees worked on the project.Add commas after "staff" and "employees". Also, is there an exact number on how many Latin American employees were part of the 10 people or how much of the group consisted of Latin Americans? I think it would be useful to add here.
His original name was Oscar, but the creative team explored other options due to the number of real-life Oscar Madrigals in Colombia.It is unclear in this sentence that the original name was not used was due to the sheer amount of people named Oscar Madrigal (number is a vague word). Maybe add "large" before number? Also, there's some WP:CLOP issues here, this sentence is very similar to the one used in the cited article.
A team of designers worked on Bruno's character design including visual development artist Meg Park who created his costume.Add comma after "design" and "Meg Park" per WP:CINS.
Costume design lead, Neysa Bove, said that...Remove the comma after "Costume design lead" since this is a WP:FALSETITLE. Also remove comma after "Neysa Bove" per WP:CINS.
Bruno features in official Encanto merchandise, including clothing, toy sets and plush dolls.Should be "is featured" instead of "features".
Bruno and the members of the family Madrigal appeared in a projection show...Isn't it "the Madrigal family"?
CNN highlighted that therapists have theorized that Bruno may be neurodivergent or have a mental illness due to being different and exhibiting unusual mannerisms.I suggest adding examples of him being different and his unusual mannerisms here.
He commented that, unlike the other Madrigal family members whose powers are valued,...Remove comma after "that".
He noted that a close analysis of the song "We Don't Talk About Bruno" reveals that rather than having done anything wrong, Bruno is simply too blunt:...The original source does not seem to say that Ian Kumamoto thinks that Bruno is blunt but rather others think so. The sentence should be edited to reflect that.
Roxy Simons writing for Newsweek commented that...Add comma after Simons and Newsweek.
particularly in the verse in which his sister Pepa complains that he ruined her wedding day by approaching her with a "mischievous grin" and causing a hurricane,...This seems like a WP:SYNTH problem; the original source only says that Pepa caused rain.
They facilitated conversations with local artisans, architects, botanists and chefs to educate the team on Columbian history and culture and expose them to everyday life. In addition to the consultants, a group of Latin American Disney employees were consulted, who watched the film and provided feedback. Castro Smith said that this was invaluable to the film's development.In cited article: This meant facilitating conversations with architects, who could speak to traditional materials used in Colombian architecture; [...] Besides the official consultants, the filmmakers also turned to the studio’s Latinx employees affiliated with the Familia group for feedback. [...] “This group watched the film and gave us really honest feedback after every time we screened it. I think their feedback was invaluable in making this movie.”
His original name was Oscar, but the creative team explored other options due to the number of real-life Oscar Madrigals in Colombia.In cited article: He was also originally named Oscar, but Bush said a legal snag over the existence of a number of real-life Oscar Madrigals in Colombia, led them to explore other name options.
Mic writer Ian Kumamato thought that Bruno's subplot reflects the way that households willingly ignore mental illness. He commented that, unlike the other Madrigal family members whose powers are valued, Bruno's power of clairvoyance disturbs the family and results in him being ignored and ostracised. He noted that a close analysis of the song "We Don't Talk About Bruno" reveals that rather than having done anything wrong, Bruno is simply too blunt: "They don’t get him, and seem to not want their family to be 'flawed' by his presence. He's misunderstood, like so many others who deal with any kind of mental illness."In cited article: To me, the song parodies the ways in which Latinx households like my own sometimes have willingly ignored mental illness in favor of upholding more pleasant facades. [...] Bruno’s superpower, which appears to be a keen intuition and clairvoyance, isn’t really recognized as helpful to anyone so he just ends up being ignored. [...] When the villagers complain about Bruno, they’re really just complaining about how blunt he is, e.g.: how he told a man he’s going to grow a gut and another that he’ll lose all his hair, probably not realizing that people don’t like to hear such prickly truths. Bruno isn’t cursed; people just don’t like him.
Simons further noted that the verse sung by Dolores reveals that Bruno was isolated and alienated because his visions left the family members "grappling with prophecies they couldn't understand".In cited article: She also shares how Bruno felt isolated and alienated from his family because they were unable to see his visions as anything other than a burden ("Always left Abuela and the family fumbling; Grappling with prophecies they couldn't understand").
Spinixster I've worked through your comments as follows.
Overall, very nice work! There's just some issues, so I'll put this on hold. If you have any questions, please ask. Spinixster (trout me!) 14:35, 2 April 2024 (UTC)
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Nominator: Fieryninja ( talk · contribs)
Reviewer: Spinixster ( talk · contribs) 03:00, 27 March 2024 (UTC)
Let's talk about Bruno. Or, in other words, I'll be reviewing this article. Comments will be coming soon (hopefully), in the meantime, I'll go over the basics:
Okay, here's the full review.
Following the release of the film, Bruno achieved viral popularity.Where did Bruno achieve viral popularity?
After finishing their work on Zootopia (2016),...
Charise Castro Smith, Bush and Howard co-directed the film.This sentence feels out of place in a paragraph talking about the writing of the film. Perhaps some context on how the directors took part in the writing of the film could help?
According to Bush the team conducted research by consulting therapists and psychologists:...Add comma after Bush.
Alejandra Espinosa was the local guide for Disney on a four-day tour of Barichara, after which she was contracted as cultural consultant.Add "a" before "cultural consultant".
A team of ten Disney staff including Latin American employees worked on the project.Add commas after "staff" and "employees". Also, is there an exact number on how many Latin American employees were part of the 10 people or how much of the group consisted of Latin Americans? I think it would be useful to add here.
His original name was Oscar, but the creative team explored other options due to the number of real-life Oscar Madrigals in Colombia.It is unclear in this sentence that the original name was not used was due to the sheer amount of people named Oscar Madrigal (number is a vague word). Maybe add "large" before number? Also, there's some WP:CLOP issues here, this sentence is very similar to the one used in the cited article.
A team of designers worked on Bruno's character design including visual development artist Meg Park who created his costume.Add comma after "design" and "Meg Park" per WP:CINS.
Costume design lead, Neysa Bove, said that...Remove the comma after "Costume design lead" since this is a WP:FALSETITLE. Also remove comma after "Neysa Bove" per WP:CINS.
Bruno features in official Encanto merchandise, including clothing, toy sets and plush dolls.Should be "is featured" instead of "features".
Bruno and the members of the family Madrigal appeared in a projection show...Isn't it "the Madrigal family"?
CNN highlighted that therapists have theorized that Bruno may be neurodivergent or have a mental illness due to being different and exhibiting unusual mannerisms.I suggest adding examples of him being different and his unusual mannerisms here.
He commented that, unlike the other Madrigal family members whose powers are valued,...Remove comma after "that".
He noted that a close analysis of the song "We Don't Talk About Bruno" reveals that rather than having done anything wrong, Bruno is simply too blunt:...The original source does not seem to say that Ian Kumamoto thinks that Bruno is blunt but rather others think so. The sentence should be edited to reflect that.
Roxy Simons writing for Newsweek commented that...Add comma after Simons and Newsweek.
particularly in the verse in which his sister Pepa complains that he ruined her wedding day by approaching her with a "mischievous grin" and causing a hurricane,...This seems like a WP:SYNTH problem; the original source only says that Pepa caused rain.
They facilitated conversations with local artisans, architects, botanists and chefs to educate the team on Columbian history and culture and expose them to everyday life. In addition to the consultants, a group of Latin American Disney employees were consulted, who watched the film and provided feedback. Castro Smith said that this was invaluable to the film's development.In cited article: This meant facilitating conversations with architects, who could speak to traditional materials used in Colombian architecture; [...] Besides the official consultants, the filmmakers also turned to the studio’s Latinx employees affiliated with the Familia group for feedback. [...] “This group watched the film and gave us really honest feedback after every time we screened it. I think their feedback was invaluable in making this movie.”
His original name was Oscar, but the creative team explored other options due to the number of real-life Oscar Madrigals in Colombia.In cited article: He was also originally named Oscar, but Bush said a legal snag over the existence of a number of real-life Oscar Madrigals in Colombia, led them to explore other name options.
Mic writer Ian Kumamato thought that Bruno's subplot reflects the way that households willingly ignore mental illness. He commented that, unlike the other Madrigal family members whose powers are valued, Bruno's power of clairvoyance disturbs the family and results in him being ignored and ostracised. He noted that a close analysis of the song "We Don't Talk About Bruno" reveals that rather than having done anything wrong, Bruno is simply too blunt: "They don’t get him, and seem to not want their family to be 'flawed' by his presence. He's misunderstood, like so many others who deal with any kind of mental illness."In cited article: To me, the song parodies the ways in which Latinx households like my own sometimes have willingly ignored mental illness in favor of upholding more pleasant facades. [...] Bruno’s superpower, which appears to be a keen intuition and clairvoyance, isn’t really recognized as helpful to anyone so he just ends up being ignored. [...] When the villagers complain about Bruno, they’re really just complaining about how blunt he is, e.g.: how he told a man he’s going to grow a gut and another that he’ll lose all his hair, probably not realizing that people don’t like to hear such prickly truths. Bruno isn’t cursed; people just don’t like him.
Simons further noted that the verse sung by Dolores reveals that Bruno was isolated and alienated because his visions left the family members "grappling with prophecies they couldn't understand".In cited article: She also shares how Bruno felt isolated and alienated from his family because they were unable to see his visions as anything other than a burden ("Always left Abuela and the family fumbling; Grappling with prophecies they couldn't understand").
Spinixster I've worked through your comments as follows.
Overall, very nice work! There's just some issues, so I'll put this on hold. If you have any questions, please ask. Spinixster (trout me!) 14:35, 2 April 2024 (UTC)