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I just submitted osteogenesis imperfecta to GAN, and even though QPQ is not a necessary part of this process, do try to do it when I have time, so I will be reviewing this article within the next week.
Reviewer: Psiĥedelisto ( talk · contribs) 16:26, 16 September 2021 (UTC)
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Srobodao84: I read your article and copy-edited part of it. I would say right now a few things jump out at me. For one thing, the article seems very
anorexia nervosa-focused, which I suppose can't be helped, but it does make me wonder as a reader how BID interacts with other eating disorders, especially very different ones like
binge eating disorder which get a passing mention. Given that people with BED tend to be obese, I wonder how that changes their experience of BID? Especially the bullet point negative body-related thoughts such as "I'm fat" or "my thighs are huge" feels anorexia/
bulimia nervosa-only to me. I feel like at least § Characteristics needs clarification as to what relates to what disorders. The other thing I notice is that image captions are not very descriptive. Why a photo of Hilde Bruch? Is she a particularly important scholar? I assume so as you extensively quote her—if so, mention her contributions and more about her under her image. The "hoop training session" is perplexing and needs an explanation of what this actually entails and what is depicted. I can only guess.
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@ Psihedelisto:
I took a morning to sort out the article. I added a more historical first part. Perhaps in this way, Hilde Bruch's introduction appears more pertinent. I also tried to explain better the part about the new treatments
Tell me if I went in line with your directions. Thanks Srobodao84 ( talk) 10:10, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
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I am pleased to pass this excellent article as a WP:Good article. Further improvement of the article could possibly be had by expanding its § Prevention, as well as handling the minor criticisms in this review. Psiĥedelisto ( talk • contribs) please always ping! 23:52, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
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I just submitted osteogenesis imperfecta to GAN, and even though QPQ is not a necessary part of this process, do try to do it when I have time, so I will be reviewing this article within the next week.
Reviewer: Psiĥedelisto ( talk · contribs) 16:26, 16 September 2021 (UTC)
@
Srobodao84: I read your article and copy-edited part of it. I would say right now a few things jump out at me. For one thing, the article seems very
anorexia nervosa-focused, which I suppose can't be helped, but it does make me wonder as a reader how BID interacts with other eating disorders, especially very different ones like
binge eating disorder which get a passing mention. Given that people with BED tend to be obese, I wonder how that changes their experience of BID? Especially the bullet point negative body-related thoughts such as "I'm fat" or "my thighs are huge" feels anorexia/
bulimia nervosa-only to me. I feel like at least § Characteristics needs clarification as to what relates to what disorders. The other thing I notice is that image captions are not very descriptive. Why a photo of Hilde Bruch? Is she a particularly important scholar? I assume so as you extensively quote her—if so, mention her contributions and more about her under her image. The "hoop training session" is perplexing and needs an explanation of what this actually entails and what is depicted. I can only guess.
Psiĥedelisto (
talk •
contribs) please always
ping! 17:14, 16 September 2021 (UTC)
@ Psihedelisto:
I took a morning to sort out the article. I added a more historical first part. Perhaps in this way, Hilde Bruch's introduction appears more pertinent. I also tried to explain better the part about the new treatments
Tell me if I went in line with your directions. Thanks Srobodao84 ( talk) 10:10, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
I am pleased to pass this excellent article as a WP:Good article. Further improvement of the article could possibly be had by expanding its § Prevention, as well as handling the minor criticisms in this review. Psiĥedelisto ( talk • contribs) please always ping! 23:52, 21 September 2021 (UTC)