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Keilana asked me to look through this article and make some comments.
Sourcing
Zad
68
21:10, 26 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
21:21, 26 July 2013 (UTC)
In general for well-studied subjects we do not want to be using primary sources. Are any of the primary sources used really necessary, can the information be sourced to secondary sources, or simply eliminated from the article?
Zad
68
04:22, 15 August 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
17:15, 15 August 2013 (UTC)It was first described in 1977.in it, that's already in History where it should be.
These growths typically first appear in a person's twenties or thirties and are found in more than 80% of people with the syndrome after this age[2] and become larger and more numerous over time.
Zad
68
21:23, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Well I had intended to try to do some copyediting but, well, didn't. Sorry! I had a hard time internalizing the content so that I could re-present it in the desired kind of prose, and I couldn't develop the enthusiasm for really digging into the sources. But it does look like you've made some good strides in making the information more accessible. As always you can ask for help at
WT:MED. Also I know there's the
WP:GOCE although I haven't tried asking there before, and it'd be interesting if you can find someone there willing to take on a technical article like this. It'd be ideal to find someone with particular expertise in genetic diseases but I can't think of anybody offhand. What you might consider doing is finding a similar GA or FA quality article and find out who brought it up to that standard, and then asking that editor.
Zad
68
17:08, 15 August 2013 (UTC)
Women and people who experience a late onset of skin symptoms tend to have less severe phenotypes.- are women not people? This is a bit unclear what populations are being discussed here.
Birt-Hogg-Dubé tumors differ on an individual basis;- meaning between individual tumors or between individual people? This part of the sentence probably should be ended with a colon (to set off a list) as opposed to a semicolon.
A large number of tumors on the face can be associated with hyperseborrhea, abnormally elevated sebum production.- probably "abnormally elevated sebum production" should be put in parethesis as an in-line explainer, instead of after a comma?
People over 20... add "years of age"
over 30% of people with Birt-Hogg-Dubé syndrome develop kidney tumors, though estimates range from 15%-30%.- this disagreement between the sources needs to be handled more elegantly
Though pneumothorax in Birt-Hogg-Dubé patients- per WP:MEDMOS we try to avoid "patient"
The BHD Foundation supports research into BHD syndrome and holds regular symposia in BHD and related disorders for researchers, clinicians, and family members.- a secondary source is really needed to demonstrate that the BHD Foundation is noteworthy enough for mention here.
Overall it's coming along nicely and you should be proud of your work! Looking forward to seeing this show up in the GAN queue, let me know if you want any more feedback from me or have any questions.
Zad
68
02:12, 18 July 2013 (UTC)
some families with FLCN mutations develop only kidney tumors or spontaneous pneumothorax- "FLCN mutation" hadn't been mentioned up to this point, need to explain what it is and why it's important/relevant before using it
The current article title is
BirtâHoggâDubĂ© syndrome with â dashes instead of - hyphens. Shouldn't the article title have keyboard-friendly hyphens instead of the dashes? If there's no objection I'd like to move the article to a title with hyphens instead of dashes.
Zad
68
01:30, 19 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
16:31, 25 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
16:38, 25 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
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to insert an emdash, or you can use the "Wiki markup" box at the bottom of the editing window to insert one.
Axl €
[Talk] 18:26, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Cryptic C62 ( talk · contribs) 16:15, 23 August 2013 (UTC)
Overall, the article looks pretty solid. We'll run through the article to fix up minor problems, and then this should be an easy pass.
I'll continue the prose review the above issues are addressed. -- Cryptic C62 · Talk 16:15, 23 August 2013 (UTC)
Not a GA requirement but turning the red links into redirects or adding something to them always makes the article look nicer. Doc James ( talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 13:18, 31 August 2013 (UTC)
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The section near the end of this article on the NIH patient registry is short and specific only to the US; it is also non-specific to this particular condition and would apply to any rare lung diseases. Would it be appropriate to just remove the section? Myoglobin ( talk) 13:41, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
BirtâHoggâDubĂ© syndrome has been listed as one of the
Natural sciences good articles under the
good article criteria. If you can improve it further,
please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can
reassess it. Review: September 7, 2013. ( Reviewed version). |
This article is rated GA-class on Wikipedia's
content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects: | |||||||||||||||||
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Ideal sources for Wikipedia's health content are defined in the guideline
Wikipedia:Identifying reliable sources (medicine) and are typically
review articles. Here are links to possibly useful sources of information about BirtâHoggâDubĂ© syndrome.
|
Keilana asked me to look through this article and make some comments.
Sourcing
Zad
68
21:10, 26 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
21:21, 26 July 2013 (UTC)
In general for well-studied subjects we do not want to be using primary sources. Are any of the primary sources used really necessary, can the information be sourced to secondary sources, or simply eliminated from the article?
Zad
68
04:22, 15 August 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
17:15, 15 August 2013 (UTC)It was first described in 1977.in it, that's already in History where it should be.
These growths typically first appear in a person's twenties or thirties and are found in more than 80% of people with the syndrome after this age[2] and become larger and more numerous over time.
Zad
68
21:23, 26 July 2013 (UTC)Well I had intended to try to do some copyediting but, well, didn't. Sorry! I had a hard time internalizing the content so that I could re-present it in the desired kind of prose, and I couldn't develop the enthusiasm for really digging into the sources. But it does look like you've made some good strides in making the information more accessible. As always you can ask for help at
WT:MED. Also I know there's the
WP:GOCE although I haven't tried asking there before, and it'd be interesting if you can find someone there willing to take on a technical article like this. It'd be ideal to find someone with particular expertise in genetic diseases but I can't think of anybody offhand. What you might consider doing is finding a similar GA or FA quality article and find out who brought it up to that standard, and then asking that editor.
Zad
68
17:08, 15 August 2013 (UTC)
Women and people who experience a late onset of skin symptoms tend to have less severe phenotypes.- are women not people? This is a bit unclear what populations are being discussed here.
Birt-Hogg-Dubé tumors differ on an individual basis;- meaning between individual tumors or between individual people? This part of the sentence probably should be ended with a colon (to set off a list) as opposed to a semicolon.
A large number of tumors on the face can be associated with hyperseborrhea, abnormally elevated sebum production.- probably "abnormally elevated sebum production" should be put in parethesis as an in-line explainer, instead of after a comma?
People over 20... add "years of age"
over 30% of people with Birt-Hogg-Dubé syndrome develop kidney tumors, though estimates range from 15%-30%.- this disagreement between the sources needs to be handled more elegantly
Though pneumothorax in Birt-Hogg-Dubé patients- per WP:MEDMOS we try to avoid "patient"
The BHD Foundation supports research into BHD syndrome and holds regular symposia in BHD and related disorders for researchers, clinicians, and family members.- a secondary source is really needed to demonstrate that the BHD Foundation is noteworthy enough for mention here.
Overall it's coming along nicely and you should be proud of your work! Looking forward to seeing this show up in the GAN queue, let me know if you want any more feedback from me or have any questions.
Zad
68
02:12, 18 July 2013 (UTC)
some families with FLCN mutations develop only kidney tumors or spontaneous pneumothorax- "FLCN mutation" hadn't been mentioned up to this point, need to explain what it is and why it's important/relevant before using it
The current article title is
BirtâHoggâDubĂ© syndrome with â dashes instead of - hyphens. Shouldn't the article title have keyboard-friendly hyphens instead of the dashes? If there's no objection I'd like to move the article to a title with hyphens instead of dashes.
Zad
68
01:30, 19 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
16:31, 25 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
16:38, 25 July 2013 (UTC)
Zad
68
—
to insert an emdash, or you can use the "Wiki markup" box at the bottom of the editing window to insert one.
Axl €
[Talk] 18:26, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
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Reviewing |
Reviewer: Cryptic C62 ( talk · contribs) 16:15, 23 August 2013 (UTC)
Overall, the article looks pretty solid. We'll run through the article to fix up minor problems, and then this should be an easy pass.
I'll continue the prose review the above issues are addressed. -- Cryptic C62 · Talk 16:15, 23 August 2013 (UTC)
Not a GA requirement but turning the red links into redirects or adding something to them always makes the article look nicer. Doc James ( talk · contribs · email) (if I write on your page reply on mine) 13:18, 31 August 2013 (UTC)
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The section near the end of this article on the NIH patient registry is short and specific only to the US; it is also non-specific to this particular condition and would apply to any rare lung diseases. Would it be appropriate to just remove the section? Myoglobin ( talk) 13:41, 27 February 2022 (UTC)