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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 20:14, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
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Hello, I'll begin reviewing this article. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 20:14, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
Agnes studied at the School of the Art Institute of Chicago under John Vanderpoel, Nellie Walker, and others– The source also lists Frederick W. Freer and Ralph Elmer Clarkson. Is there any reason for the selection of names here?
This drawing is shown here (see Image No. 1).– This format interrupts the flow of the text. Instead of numbering the images, perhaps it would be better to write out their full titles in the text. With a few exceptions, articles shouldn’t reference themselves by saying things like "here". This applies to all 12 such labels.
Weinrich was somewhat in advance of Knaths in adopting a modernist style.– This could probably be reworded.
This critic characterized the artists as "radicals"– This is a redundancy as the word "radicals" was already used in the previous quote.
Critics were not always pleased with what they saw, but occasionally balanced their critiques with praise.– This could be said of just about any artist, and I don’t think this sentence adds anything to the article.
she received one unqualified rave review– Is this a technical term?
News sources report three solo exhibitions– Avoid attributing to vague "news sources". It might read better if it said "She held multiple solo exhibitions, including..." or something to that effect.
Its main source is Louise Noun's article on Weinrich in Woman's Art Journal– This list doesn’t need attribution, particularly if some of the attributed sources don’t have corresponding inline citations. It would probably be better to remove this sentence and apply inline citations where appropriate.
Weinrich's principal biographer, Louise Noun.– According to whom is Noun her principal biographer? This shouldn't be claimed unless it's stated as a biographical fact in its own right with a citation.
Her output continued to vary in subject matter and treatment.) and Critical reception (
an environment where men attracted more critical attention and sold more works of art.)
Thanks, Thebiguglyalien. I have tried to correct the problems you identified without adding new ones. In one or two instances — details of later life for example — I was hampered by lack of information, and noted this fact. My numbering of images was a somewhat awkward attempt to help readers using small screens to relate images to text. I followed your suggestion but am not sure the result is better than the awkwardness and self-referencing of the numbering approach. -- Delabrede ( talk)
Available sources give little information about the latter stages of her career.– While it may be true, this seems to be original research and probably shouldn't be included without a source explicitly saying that this information is unknown.
Essentially, once information on her style is sufficiently covered and organized, this should meet the GA criteria. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 17:07, 27 October 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 20:14, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
GA review – see
WP:WIAGA for criteria
Hello, I'll begin reviewing this article. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 20:14, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
Agnes studied at the School of the Art Institute of Chicago under John Vanderpoel, Nellie Walker, and others– The source also lists Frederick W. Freer and Ralph Elmer Clarkson. Is there any reason for the selection of names here?
This drawing is shown here (see Image No. 1).– This format interrupts the flow of the text. Instead of numbering the images, perhaps it would be better to write out their full titles in the text. With a few exceptions, articles shouldn’t reference themselves by saying things like "here". This applies to all 12 such labels.
Weinrich was somewhat in advance of Knaths in adopting a modernist style.– This could probably be reworded.
This critic characterized the artists as "radicals"– This is a redundancy as the word "radicals" was already used in the previous quote.
Critics were not always pleased with what they saw, but occasionally balanced their critiques with praise.– This could be said of just about any artist, and I don’t think this sentence adds anything to the article.
she received one unqualified rave review– Is this a technical term?
News sources report three solo exhibitions– Avoid attributing to vague "news sources". It might read better if it said "She held multiple solo exhibitions, including..." or something to that effect.
Its main source is Louise Noun's article on Weinrich in Woman's Art Journal– This list doesn’t need attribution, particularly if some of the attributed sources don’t have corresponding inline citations. It would probably be better to remove this sentence and apply inline citations where appropriate.
Weinrich's principal biographer, Louise Noun.– According to whom is Noun her principal biographer? This shouldn't be claimed unless it's stated as a biographical fact in its own right with a citation.
Her output continued to vary in subject matter and treatment.) and Critical reception (
an environment where men attracted more critical attention and sold more works of art.)
Thanks, Thebiguglyalien. I have tried to correct the problems you identified without adding new ones. In one or two instances — details of later life for example — I was hampered by lack of information, and noted this fact. My numbering of images was a somewhat awkward attempt to help readers using small screens to relate images to text. I followed your suggestion but am not sure the result is better than the awkwardness and self-referencing of the numbering approach. -- Delabrede ( talk)
Available sources give little information about the latter stages of her career.– While it may be true, this seems to be original research and probably shouldn't be included without a source explicitly saying that this information is unknown.
Essentially, once information on her style is sufficiently covered and organized, this should meet the GA criteria. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 17:07, 27 October 2022 (UTC)