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If anyone is able to find more information on this organization, please post it here, and I will add it to the article. Redian( Talk) 22:21, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
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The article is not written from a neutral point of view; see Special:Permalink/1016272472 and Special:Permalink/1016272494 for two revisions that look like a marketing catalogue, with bold formatting incorrectly used for emphasis ( do not use boldfacing for emphasis). The current revision ( Special:Permalink/1016437024) is still not neutral.
The lack of neutrality starts with the headings: "Vision, mission and activities" are an appropriate heading for the organization's website, but not a neutral encyclopedia. I propose to split these into "History", "Facilities" and "Activities"; there's no encyclopedic need to focus on a "vision". We should describe neutrally what the organization does, not what it intends to do.
The content focuses on awards, even in the lead section ( Special:Diff/1016277140, Special:Permalink/1016437024), which inserts unduly weighted material into a section reserved for a summary of its most important contents. I would like to reduce this undue focus and remove the praising awards paragraph from the lead section.
Statements such as "ADHOC's commitment and ground-breaking work has long been recognized" and "This broad reach underpins" are not neutral; they subjectively judge the article subject. A lack of reliable inline citations especially at Special:Permalink/1016272494, and a lack of independent secondary sources, made me challenge some of the statements; they should not reappear in the article without a proper citation ( WP:BURDEN). For example, I'd like to see a reliable independent source that directly supports the sentence "ADHOC's commitment and ground-breaking work has long been recognized". Before such a source is provided, we don't even need to discuss the neutrality of the sentence; it simply lacks verifiability.
Large sub-headings like "Community empowerment" and "Assistance to victims" are not neutral; they push positive terms like "empowerment" and "assistance" into the reader's mind with an emphasis even stronger than boldfaced text.
I propose to restore Special:Permalink/1016277551, as it fixes most of these problems. ~ ToBeFree ( talk) 03:20, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
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If anyone is able to find more information on this organization, please post it here, and I will add it to the article. Redian( Talk) 22:21, 30 March 2007 (UTC)
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The article is not written from a neutral point of view; see Special:Permalink/1016272472 and Special:Permalink/1016272494 for two revisions that look like a marketing catalogue, with bold formatting incorrectly used for emphasis ( do not use boldfacing for emphasis). The current revision ( Special:Permalink/1016437024) is still not neutral.
The lack of neutrality starts with the headings: "Vision, mission and activities" are an appropriate heading for the organization's website, but not a neutral encyclopedia. I propose to split these into "History", "Facilities" and "Activities"; there's no encyclopedic need to focus on a "vision". We should describe neutrally what the organization does, not what it intends to do.
The content focuses on awards, even in the lead section ( Special:Diff/1016277140, Special:Permalink/1016437024), which inserts unduly weighted material into a section reserved for a summary of its most important contents. I would like to reduce this undue focus and remove the praising awards paragraph from the lead section.
Statements such as "ADHOC's commitment and ground-breaking work has long been recognized" and "This broad reach underpins" are not neutral; they subjectively judge the article subject. A lack of reliable inline citations especially at Special:Permalink/1016272494, and a lack of independent secondary sources, made me challenge some of the statements; they should not reappear in the article without a proper citation ( WP:BURDEN). For example, I'd like to see a reliable independent source that directly supports the sentence "ADHOC's commitment and ground-breaking work has long been recognized". Before such a source is provided, we don't even need to discuss the neutrality of the sentence; it simply lacks verifiability.
Large sub-headings like "Community empowerment" and "Assistance to victims" are not neutral; they push positive terms like "empowerment" and "assistance" into the reader's mind with an emphasis even stronger than boldfaced text.
I propose to restore Special:Permalink/1016277551, as it fixes most of these problems. ~ ToBeFree ( talk) 03:20, 10 April 2021 (UTC)