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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 04:52, 27 February 2023 (UTC)
I think this one has waited quite long enough for a review. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 04:52, 27 February 2023 (UTC)
Complies with all necessary Manual of Style pages. Notes on the prose:
was drafted in to be their sound engineer, replacing their older one.– It can probably be assumed that he replaced the previous one. I don't think this clause needs to be there unless it specifies who he replaced.
Despite writing five songs in January 2015– Not sure if "despite" is the right word here. It might be better to just say that he wrote five songs but struggled to write more.
Syner and Champion served as engineers.– Maybe I'm just not well-versed in music production, but what does this mean? The article doesn't provide any additional context.
Discussing "Weakened", Hunt said he would not typically give relationship advice when asked but might do so if he was in the mood.– This is a little unclear. Is this what the whole song is about, or is it just referencing one part of it?
and has the same happy atmosphere as "Full of Life (Happy Now)"– Define atmosphere.
this was the first time an album they appeared on charted– "appeared on charted" is a strange turn of phrase that I had to read twice to understand.
it was promoted with an anniversary tour, changes the subject to charting, and then goes back to
The Wonder Stuff followed the tour. These sentences should be rearranged.
I can't think of a better place to get it than– The quote should be transcribed in a way that avoids personal pronouns. It might be preferable just to rewrite the sentence without this part of the quote.
Standard references list. All sources are reliable (HuffPost is marginal but should be fine for this use, YouTube is acceptable as it's a valid primary source in this case). WP:EARWIG only picks up attributed quotes. I've checked the following sources:
Only one issue in this area: make sure that all quotes and attributed opinions have inline citations immediately following them, even if it duplicates one used in the next sentence.
No issues with unnecessary detail. The only major omission that stands out is that there's no information about the album cover or the packaging. I'd also suggest more information about each individual song, but that would be a task for FA rather than GA.
Hunt was "optimistic that we might see the back of the Tory bully boys that had been in charge for too long"could still be interpreted as WP:Wikivoice or otherwise endorsing his opinion.
No recent edits to article or talk page.
The only image is the album cover in the infobox with a standard non-free use rationale.
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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 04:52, 27 February 2023 (UTC)
I think this one has waited quite long enough for a review. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 04:52, 27 February 2023 (UTC)
Complies with all necessary Manual of Style pages. Notes on the prose:
was drafted in to be their sound engineer, replacing their older one.– It can probably be assumed that he replaced the previous one. I don't think this clause needs to be there unless it specifies who he replaced.
Despite writing five songs in January 2015– Not sure if "despite" is the right word here. It might be better to just say that he wrote five songs but struggled to write more.
Syner and Champion served as engineers.– Maybe I'm just not well-versed in music production, but what does this mean? The article doesn't provide any additional context.
Discussing "Weakened", Hunt said he would not typically give relationship advice when asked but might do so if he was in the mood.– This is a little unclear. Is this what the whole song is about, or is it just referencing one part of it?
and has the same happy atmosphere as "Full of Life (Happy Now)"– Define atmosphere.
this was the first time an album they appeared on charted– "appeared on charted" is a strange turn of phrase that I had to read twice to understand.
it was promoted with an anniversary tour, changes the subject to charting, and then goes back to
The Wonder Stuff followed the tour. These sentences should be rearranged.
I can't think of a better place to get it than– The quote should be transcribed in a way that avoids personal pronouns. It might be preferable just to rewrite the sentence without this part of the quote.
Standard references list. All sources are reliable (HuffPost is marginal but should be fine for this use, YouTube is acceptable as it's a valid primary source in this case). WP:EARWIG only picks up attributed quotes. I've checked the following sources:
Only one issue in this area: make sure that all quotes and attributed opinions have inline citations immediately following them, even if it duplicates one used in the next sentence.
No issues with unnecessary detail. The only major omission that stands out is that there's no information about the album cover or the packaging. I'd also suggest more information about each individual song, but that would be a task for FA rather than GA.
Hunt was "optimistic that we might see the back of the Tory bully boys that had been in charge for too long"could still be interpreted as WP:Wikivoice or otherwise endorsing his opinion.
No recent edits to article or talk page.
The only image is the album cover in the infobox with a standard non-free use rationale.