"Soon after, Busch became the leader of the race; he would maintain the lead most of the race to lead the most laps (218)" - Maybe something like "Soon after, Busch became the leader of the race and would maintain a total of 218 laps in first place"
"The back stretch, opposite of the front, also had a five degree banking" - "Opposite of the front" isn't need as it was already established the course is an oval.
"Kurt Busch with 5,533 was twenty-two points ahead of Carl Edwards, as Jeff Burton with 5,496 points, was thirteen ahead of Kyle Busch, and forty-one in front of Greg Biffle." - What is the point of the sentence? Which position were these racers in? I'm assuming they were in positions six and below. But then again, why are these positions relevant?
Same goes with the next sentence. What is the significance of being in 11th and 12th?
The top twelve drivers qualified for the Chase for the Sprint Cup, known today as the
NASCAR playoffs. --
Bcschneider53 (
talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)reply
Practice and Qualifying
"Three practice sessions was held before the Saturday race..." - "Three practice sessions were held before the Saturday race..."
"During the first practice session, Ryan Newman of the Stewart-Haas Racing team was quickest ahead of..." - To be honest I don't have any good suggestions but "quickest ahead" breaks the flow of the sentence when I read it. I think this entire sentence needs to be reworded.
"Gordon maintained the lead during the caution to lead on the restart" - Correct me if I'm wrong but I thought cars could not pass each other during a caution/yellow flag. Maybe I'm just confusing this with F1?
"Soon after, Busch became the leader of the race; he would maintain the lead most of the race to lead the most laps (218)" - Maybe something like "Soon after, Busch became the leader of the race and would maintain a total of 218 laps in first place"
"The back stretch, opposite of the front, also had a five degree banking" - "Opposite of the front" isn't need as it was already established the course is an oval.
"Kurt Busch with 5,533 was twenty-two points ahead of Carl Edwards, as Jeff Burton with 5,496 points, was thirteen ahead of Kyle Busch, and forty-one in front of Greg Biffle." - What is the point of the sentence? Which position were these racers in? I'm assuming they were in positions six and below. But then again, why are these positions relevant?
Same goes with the next sentence. What is the significance of being in 11th and 12th?
The top twelve drivers qualified for the Chase for the Sprint Cup, known today as the
NASCAR playoffs. --
Bcschneider53 (
talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)reply
Practice and Qualifying
"Three practice sessions was held before the Saturday race..." - "Three practice sessions were held before the Saturday race..."
"During the first practice session, Ryan Newman of the Stewart-Haas Racing team was quickest ahead of..." - To be honest I don't have any good suggestions but "quickest ahead" breaks the flow of the sentence when I read it. I think this entire sentence needs to be reworded.
"Gordon maintained the lead during the caution to lead on the restart" - Correct me if I'm wrong but I thought cars could not pass each other during a caution/yellow flag. Maybe I'm just confusing this with F1?