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[4][5][6]).
Create timelines, both textual and graphical. See link for various guidelines and examples. We need an overall one for cue sports generally, and more specific ones as we drill down into more specific topics (timeline of
nine-ball, timeline of
Willie Mosconi's career, etc.).
Form sections:
Exhibition game needs section on cue sports; could later form a new article with "Main article..." xref to it. What other general articles need cue sports sections?
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Add: {{Sport overview}} to main articles of cue games that are real sports; medal table tags where they apply (see
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eleventh - MOS:NUM suggests we should be consistent, and we use numbers in this sentence elsewhere. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I feel like the bit about the participants and debutants could go in the first para, and have the second para be the results of the tournament. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
There were nine participants. Championship debutants Bill Withers and Fred Davis, the younger brother of Joe Davis, played a qualifying match in January 1937, which Withers won to progress to the main event. - how about There were nine participants at the event, with debutants Fred Davis (brother of Joe) and Bill Withers competing in a qualifying match. Withers won the match to participate with the remaining seven players. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Amended. I tweaked your proposed wording slightly, mainly because Joe Davis hasn't appeared in the text yet. (Not sure if the change hs introduced plus-ing, but I've not seen that as an issue for a GA nominee).
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 12:48, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I feel like opening the summary section with the amount of frames required to win would be suitable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I've added this at the end of the first para.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 13:28, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Davis managed to level the score with just the blacks left. - typo on black? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Billiards and Snooker magazine's commentary on the tournament stated that the standard of play was higher than in any of the preceding championships. Praising Joe Davis, the article suggested that "It may be doubted if any game was so completely, so perfectly interpreted as is snooker by Davis. - worth mentioning the author William Clifford? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
There's no byline on the article. Clifford was both editor and publisher before the magazine was taken over by the BACC but I don't think we can assume that he wrote that article.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 13:28, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
We do, however, cite him in the reference. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 08:32, 27 October 2021 (UTC)reply
As publisher, though. I've added an author parameter per "To cite a news article with no credited author" at
Template:Cite news, but I don't think that affects how the reference displays to a reader.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 10:38, 27 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I feel like the schedule should be part of the draw section. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at
WP:GAN and
WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 16:18, 14 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Apologies for the delay, reviewing this now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:04, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Many thanks,
Lee Vilenski. I've amended the article and replied to the points above. Let me know about anything else that is required. Regards,
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 13:29, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
This article is within the scope of WikiProject Snooker, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
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the discussion and see a list of open tasks.SnookerWikipedia:WikiProject SnookerTemplate:WikiProject SnookerSnooker articles
This article is within the scope of WikiProject England, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
England on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
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This article is within the scope of WikiProject Cue sports, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of
pool,
carom billiards and other
cue sports on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join
the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Cue sportsWikipedia:WikiProject Cue sportsTemplate:WikiProject Cue sportscue sports articles
Internal pages: Something like:
[2][3]). Such pages are not fluff, but can be good places to find recruits for the project, possibly including subject-matter experts, especially if cross-referenced to the project. Also,
Wikipedia:WikiProject Deletion sorting/Cue sports (cf.
[4][5][6]).
Create timelines, both textual and graphical. See link for various guidelines and examples. We need an overall one for cue sports generally, and more specific ones as we drill down into more specific topics (timeline of
nine-ball, timeline of
Willie Mosconi's career, etc.).
Form sections:
Exhibition game needs section on cue sports; could later form a new article with "Main article..." xref to it. What other general articles need cue sports sections?
Images: improve articles with images from commons; create pics and add them to commons as GFDL/CC-by/PD.
Add: {{Sport overview}} to main articles of cue games that are real sports; medal table tags where they apply (see
Ding Junhui for example).
Insert: Cue sports events (tournament results, etc.) into the "year in sports" categories (e.g.
1965 in sports), using {{subst:
Cue sports heading}} if that year doesn't have one yet.
Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for
GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
Links
Prose
Lede
eleventh - MOS:NUM suggests we should be consistent, and we use numbers in this sentence elsewhere. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I feel like the bit about the participants and debutants could go in the first para, and have the second para be the results of the tournament. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
There were nine participants. Championship debutants Bill Withers and Fred Davis, the younger brother of Joe Davis, played a qualifying match in January 1937, which Withers won to progress to the main event. - how about There were nine participants at the event, with debutants Fred Davis (brother of Joe) and Bill Withers competing in a qualifying match. Withers won the match to participate with the remaining seven players. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:08, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Amended. I tweaked your proposed wording slightly, mainly because Joe Davis hasn't appeared in the text yet. (Not sure if the change hs introduced plus-ing, but I've not seen that as an issue for a GA nominee).
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 12:48, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I feel like opening the summary section with the amount of frames required to win would be suitable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I've added this at the end of the first para.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 13:28, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Davis managed to level the score with just the blacks left. - typo on black? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Billiards and Snooker magazine's commentary on the tournament stated that the standard of play was higher than in any of the preceding championships. Praising Joe Davis, the article suggested that "It may be doubted if any game was so completely, so perfectly interpreted as is snooker by Davis. - worth mentioning the author William Clifford? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
There's no byline on the article. Clifford was both editor and publisher before the magazine was taken over by the BACC but I don't think we can assume that he wrote that article.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 13:28, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
We do, however, cite him in the reference. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 08:32, 27 October 2021 (UTC)reply
As publisher, though. I've added an author parameter per "To cite a news article with no credited author" at
Template:Cite news, but I don't think that affects how the reference displays to a reader.
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 10:38, 27 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I feel like the schedule should be part of the draw section. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:19, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at
WP:GAN and
WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 16:18, 14 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Apologies for the delay, reviewing this now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs) 12:04, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply
Many thanks,
Lee Vilenski. I've amended the article and replied to the points above. Let me know about anything else that is required. Regards,
BennyOnTheLoose (
talk) 13:29, 25 October 2021 (UTC)reply