Hi! I will be doing the GA review for this article, and I should have the full review up within a few hours. Dana boomer ( talk) 14:46, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (
MoS):
The "Cold War Era" header needs its last word decapitalized.- Prose section detailed below.
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to
reliable sources):
c (
OR):
References should have the author first (last name, first name) (if available), then title, then publisher.The last sentence of the "Organization" section needs a reference.In the "War on terrorism" section, the last sentence of the first paragraph needs a ref.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Prose: (the suggested re-wordings are only suggestions, you may take them or leave them)
Lead:
"several other contingencies," "Contingencies" is odd in this context, try "operations"."area thanks to the 1999 Bosnian War." "Thanks to" is un-encyclopedic, try "generated by"."The brigade is currently serving in the Baghdad area." Avoid "currently", try "as of 2008, the brigade".
Organization:
"attached; The 793rd Military Police Brigade", either make it a new sentence or decapitalize "the"."process of inactivating," try "deactivating".
Vietnam War:
Lots of short paragraphs; try to combine some of them."process of inactivating," again, "deactivating".
Cold War Era:
Again, short paragraphs.Quite a few red links. Do these have a decent chance of becoming articles? If not, delink.- "as Headquarters and Headquarters Company", this sounds odd. Is it what it's supposed to say?
- That's exactly what it is; " Headquarters and Headquarters Company" is a single, proper noun in this context.
War on Terrorism:
Again, red links.First sentence, too many "and"s.
Overall, this is a good article. I am putting this article on hold for seven days as most of my comments are very minor, and shouldn't take long to fix. If you have questions, you can ask them here on the review page or on my talk page. Dana boomer ( talk) 15:25, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Taken care of. How does it look now? - Ed! (talk) (Hall of Fame) 16:40, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Very nice! Thank you for the prompt response, and also for the patient explanation of HHC, which I now realize I completely missed as being linked in the section above. *grin* I have no more qualms with the article, and I am promoting it to GA. Dana boomer ( talk) 16:46, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
Hi! I will be doing the GA review for this article, and I should have the full review up within a few hours. Dana boomer ( talk) 14:46, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (
MoS):
The "Cold War Era" header needs its last word decapitalized.- Prose section detailed below.
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR):
References should have the author first (last name, first name) (if available), then title, then publisher.The last sentence of the "Organization" section needs a reference.In the "War on terrorism" section, the last sentence of the first paragraph needs a ref.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Prose: (the suggested re-wordings are only suggestions, you may take them or leave them)
Lead:
"several other contingencies," "Contingencies" is odd in this context, try "operations"."area thanks to the 1999 Bosnian War." "Thanks to" is un-encyclopedic, try "generated by"."The brigade is currently serving in the Baghdad area." Avoid "currently", try "as of 2008, the brigade".
Organization:
"attached; The 793rd Military Police Brigade", either make it a new sentence or decapitalize "the"."process of inactivating," try "deactivating".
Vietnam War:
Lots of short paragraphs; try to combine some of them."process of inactivating," again, "deactivating".
Cold War Era:
Again, short paragraphs.Quite a few red links. Do these have a decent chance of becoming articles? If not, delink.- "as Headquarters and Headquarters Company", this sounds odd. Is it what it's supposed to say?
- That's exactly what it is; " Headquarters and Headquarters Company" is a single, proper noun in this context.
War on Terrorism:
Again, red links.First sentence, too many "and"s.
Overall, this is a good article. I am putting this article on hold for seven days as most of my comments are very minor, and shouldn't take long to fix. If you have questions, you can ask them here on the review page or on my talk page. Dana boomer ( talk) 15:25, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Taken care of. How does it look now? - Ed! (talk) (Hall of Fame) 16:40, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
- Very nice! Thank you for the prompt response, and also for the patient explanation of HHC, which I now realize I completely missed as being linked in the section above. *grin* I have no more qualms with the article, and I am promoting it to GA. Dana boomer ( talk) 16:46, 19 August 2008 (UTC)