"… eventually leading to the finding of the rail." perhaps reword to avoid passive voice
Done
"Cervera was also the finder of the" how about "Cervera also found the"
Done
wlink plumage, down
Done
"The sexes are similar," add "in appearance"?
Done
"similar to Bare-legged Owl" either add "the" or pluralize owls
Done
link nominate subspecies
Done
"Typical plants are…" not clear what's typical about them? Typical plants found in the vegetation preferred by the Zapata Rail?
Done
"James Bond found a nest…" perhaps add "American ornithologist". The Ian Fleming name connection was interesting, will definitely drop that tidbit in a future conversation.
Done
"…pectoral girdle and wing are as reduced as in other species of rails…"; link pectoral girdle
Done
"…very susceptible to introduced predators." link introduced (also in lead too)
Done
230 hectares -> convert
Done
link predation (?), protected areas,
conservation measures, ecotourism
Done
"The Zapata Rail is classed as endangered" classed->classified
Done
"but Cuba's Tourism Minister and Pablo Bouza" does the tourism minister have a name?
he does, done
"global warming" and "climate change" are used in consecutive sentences. Does the source use these (politically-loaded) terms? Couldn't global warming also lead to higher ocean temperatures?
The source has "Climate change" in the title. I don't think these are politically loaded except in the US - it's mainstream science elsewhere
"..once the fallen vegetation had dried out." -> dries out
Done
Caption: "… is a serious predator" could use better adjective than "serious"
Done "major"
et al. needs a fullstop (abbreviation of et alii/aliae/alia)
Done
I know you aren't a fan of unnecessary punctuation, but it looks inconsistent to have some refs ending in a fullstop (because the template puts them there) and some not
Done!
foreign-language titles sources should include a translated title
Done
why not put accessdate directly in citation template? (parameter accessdate= )
Don't know, I had problems withthe template at one time so now I avoid it.
the above ref tweaks are beyond GA criteria, so feel free to ignore
I don't understand, it's in para 3 of status (I've changed the link to the species now) and the image caption, where else do you think it should be mentioned? Jimfbleak - talk to me?15:16, 31 March 2010 (UTC)reply
"… eventually leading to the finding of the rail." perhaps reword to avoid passive voice
Done
"Cervera was also the finder of the" how about "Cervera also found the"
Done
wlink plumage, down
Done
"The sexes are similar," add "in appearance"?
Done
"similar to Bare-legged Owl" either add "the" or pluralize owls
Done
link nominate subspecies
Done
"Typical plants are…" not clear what's typical about them? Typical plants found in the vegetation preferred by the Zapata Rail?
Done
"James Bond found a nest…" perhaps add "American ornithologist". The Ian Fleming name connection was interesting, will definitely drop that tidbit in a future conversation.
Done
"…pectoral girdle and wing are as reduced as in other species of rails…"; link pectoral girdle
Done
"…very susceptible to introduced predators." link introduced (also in lead too)
Done
230 hectares -> convert
Done
link predation (?), protected areas,
conservation measures, ecotourism
Done
"The Zapata Rail is classed as endangered" classed->classified
Done
"but Cuba's Tourism Minister and Pablo Bouza" does the tourism minister have a name?
he does, done
"global warming" and "climate change" are used in consecutive sentences. Does the source use these (politically-loaded) terms? Couldn't global warming also lead to higher ocean temperatures?
The source has "Climate change" in the title. I don't think these are politically loaded except in the US - it's mainstream science elsewhere
"..once the fallen vegetation had dried out." -> dries out
Done
Caption: "… is a serious predator" could use better adjective than "serious"
Done "major"
et al. needs a fullstop (abbreviation of et alii/aliae/alia)
Done
I know you aren't a fan of unnecessary punctuation, but it looks inconsistent to have some refs ending in a fullstop (because the template puts them there) and some not
Done!
foreign-language titles sources should include a translated title
Done
why not put accessdate directly in citation template? (parameter accessdate= )
Don't know, I had problems withthe template at one time so now I avoid it.
the above ref tweaks are beyond GA criteria, so feel free to ignore
I don't understand, it's in para 3 of status (I've changed the link to the species now) and the image caption, where else do you think it should be mentioned? Jimfbleak - talk to me?15:16, 31 March 2010 (UTC)reply