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Reviewer: Realmaxxver ( talk · contribs) 11:59, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
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"At Alomar's suggestion, Bowie hired former drummer of Sly and the Family Stone, Andy Newmark and bassist Willie Weeks of the Isley Brothers to replace Tony Newman and Herbie Flowers, respectively." → "At Alomar's suggestion, Bowie hired former drummer of Sly and the Family Stone, Andy Newmark to replace Tony Newman, and bassist Willie Weeks of the Isley Brothers to replace Herbie Flowers."
Philadelphia sessions
"Demo work began at Sigma Sound on 8 August 1974, while official work commenced on 11 August upon Visconti's arrival.[17]" → "Demo work began at Sigma Sound on 8 August 1974, but official work commenced three days later upon Visconti's arrival.[17]"
New York sessions
"Following the conclusion of the second half of the Diamond Dogs tour in December (referred to as the Soul tour)" I feel like it would be more easier to just say "Following the conclusion of the Soul tour in December".
"At this point, Bowie told Disc the title would be Fascination (named after the newly recorded track); "John, I'm Only Dancing (Again)" was still in the track-listing but the two new tracks replacing "Who Can I Be Now?" and "Somebody Up There Likes Me".[19]" - "replacing" should be in past tense (replaced); "At this point, Bowie told Disc the title would be Fascination (named after the newly recorded track). "John, I'm Only Dancing (Again)" was still in the track-listing, but the two new tracks replaced "Who Can I Be Now?" and "Somebody Up There Likes Me".[19]"
"Bowie contacted Visconti about the collaborations two weeks after Visconti finished mixing." I feel like a date should be included here (If a date was specified in the source).
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I would like to say, the copyvio does not look the best. Realmaxxver ( talk) 21:22, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
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"At Alomar's suggestion, Bowie hired former drummer of Sly and the Family Stone, Andy Newmark and bassist Willie Weeks of the Isley Brothers to replace Tony Newman and Herbie Flowers, respectively." → "At Alomar's suggestion, Bowie hired former drummer of Sly and the Family Stone, Andy Newmark to replace Tony Newman, and bassist Willie Weeks of the Isley Brothers to replace Herbie Flowers."
Philadelphia sessions
"Demo work began at Sigma Sound on 8 August 1974, while official work commenced on 11 August upon Visconti's arrival.[17]" → "Demo work began at Sigma Sound on 8 August 1974, but official work commenced three days later upon Visconti's arrival.[17]"
New York sessions
"Following the conclusion of the second half of the Diamond Dogs tour in December (referred to as the Soul tour)" I feel like it would be more easier to just say "Following the conclusion of the Soul tour in December".
"At this point, Bowie told Disc the title would be Fascination (named after the newly recorded track); "John, I'm Only Dancing (Again)" was still in the track-listing but the two new tracks replacing "Who Can I Be Now?" and "Somebody Up There Likes Me".[19]" - "replacing" should be in past tense (replaced); "At this point, Bowie told Disc the title would be Fascination (named after the newly recorded track). "John, I'm Only Dancing (Again)" was still in the track-listing, but the two new tracks replaced "Who Can I Be Now?" and "Somebody Up There Likes Me".[19]"
"Bowie contacted Visconti about the collaborations two weeks after Visconti finished mixing." I feel like a date should be included here (If a date was specified in the source).
Songs
Side one
Side two
Outtakes
Release and promotion
Legacy
Reissues
I would like to say, the copyvio does not look the best. Realmaxxver ( talk) 21:22, 29 November 2021 (UTC)