A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
"Written by Gaga and produced by her and Robert John "Mutt" Lange" → "Written by Gaga and co-produced with Robert John "Mutt" Lange". I don't think "by her" is reads well.
"and positive" → "a positive".
"then-boyfriend" → You have used "former boyfriend" in the Background section which is better.
"Gaga and Lange giving background vocals." → "providing background..."
"due to digital downloads" → "due to strong digital download sales"
Background
"and positive" → "a positive".
The paragraph quote has an end quotation mark, but not a start quotation mark. You could use this to improve the aesthetic:
“
...
”
Reception
"the Billboard Hot 100" → "the US..."
Live performances
It may be worth just mentioning that the first time the song was performed, although it wasn't a live performance, was at Elton John's party.
Great article, very informative, I enjoyed reading it as there is hardly anything to ammend, tell me when you've done them and I'll pass it :)
Calvin •
99912:34, 6 July 2011 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
"Written by Gaga and produced by her and Robert John "Mutt" Lange" → "Written by Gaga and co-produced with Robert John "Mutt" Lange". I don't think "by her" is reads well.
"and positive" → "a positive".
"then-boyfriend" → You have used "former boyfriend" in the Background section which is better.
"Gaga and Lange giving background vocals." → "providing background..."
"due to digital downloads" → "due to strong digital download sales"
Background
"and positive" → "a positive".
The paragraph quote has an end quotation mark, but not a start quotation mark. You could use this to improve the aesthetic:
“
...
”
Reception
"the Billboard Hot 100" → "the US..."
Live performances
It may be worth just mentioning that the first time the song was performed, although it wasn't a live performance, was at Elton John's party.
Great article, very informative, I enjoyed reading it as there is hardly anything to ammend, tell me when you've done them and I'll pass it :)
Calvin •
99912:34, 6 July 2011 (UTC)reply
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.