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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna ( talk · contribs) 00:27, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.
All images used are relevant, high quality and copyright-free:
File:YEEZY GAP.png
: good, valid public domain rationale;File:YZY GAP, Chicago banner.jpg
: good, CC-BY-SA 2.0. Although, I wish this was not in B&W but alas.Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 4, 9, 14, 15, 22 or 24.
Infobox, Notes, short description, nav and cats good.
@ LunaEatsTuna: I think that's everything! Thanks for taking the time to review ULPS ( talk) 20:09, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
Noticed a slight problem that whomever may want to address.
"American clothing company Gap announced in June 2020, with its first wave of clothing releasing a year later in June 2021."
Ok but...
"In January 2022 the brand announced its collaboration with luxury fashion house Balenciaga, with the first collection from that line releasing the following month. It was terminated two years after its announcement in September 2022 after a series of disagreements between West and Gap executives."
So I think you're saying that the Yeezy Gap Collab started in June 2020 and was terminated in September 2022. And you are also saying maybe the Yeezy Gap brand announced another collaboration with Balenciaga in 2022 and ran until the end of Yeezy Gap.
If that was the intent I would suggest a rewrite for clarity as the use of the pronoun "it" makes it appear as if you are saying that Yeezy Gap started in 2020 and put out product in 2021.
And then you make a separate statement that in 2022 Yeezy Gap formed a collaboration with Balenciaga which ended two years later in 2022. Obviously that isn't possible.
Mayhaps the use of proper nouns, as there are multiple subjects, or a restructuring of the paragraph to keep your use of pronouns, but use them to refer to the last named subject.
Just my thoughts. 2600:8804:88C1:4100:716E:2D77:21C6:1405 ( talk) 13:58, 18 May 2023 (UTC)
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna ( talk · contribs) 00:27, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.
All images used are relevant, high quality and copyright-free:
File:YEEZY GAP.png
: good, valid public domain rationale;File:YZY GAP, Chicago banner.jpg
: good, CC-BY-SA 2.0. Although, I wish this was not in B&W but alas.Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 4, 9, 14, 15, 22 or 24.
Infobox, Notes, short description, nav and cats good.
@ LunaEatsTuna: I think that's everything! Thanks for taking the time to review ULPS ( talk) 20:09, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
Noticed a slight problem that whomever may want to address.
"American clothing company Gap announced in June 2020, with its first wave of clothing releasing a year later in June 2021."
Ok but...
"In January 2022 the brand announced its collaboration with luxury fashion house Balenciaga, with the first collection from that line releasing the following month. It was terminated two years after its announcement in September 2022 after a series of disagreements between West and Gap executives."
So I think you're saying that the Yeezy Gap Collab started in June 2020 and was terminated in September 2022. And you are also saying maybe the Yeezy Gap brand announced another collaboration with Balenciaga in 2022 and ran until the end of Yeezy Gap.
If that was the intent I would suggest a rewrite for clarity as the use of the pronoun "it" makes it appear as if you are saying that Yeezy Gap started in 2020 and put out product in 2021.
And then you make a separate statement that in 2022 Yeezy Gap formed a collaboration with Balenciaga which ended two years later in 2022. Obviously that isn't possible.
Mayhaps the use of proper nouns, as there are multiple subjects, or a restructuring of the paragraph to keep your use of pronouns, but use them to refer to the last named subject.
Just my thoughts. 2600:8804:88C1:4100:716E:2D77:21C6:1405 ( talk) 13:58, 18 May 2023 (UTC)