Change electronic dance to EDM in the infobox because the source calls the album "
electronic dance music", which is another way of saying the genre EDM
Not done I meant list the genre as EDM
Remove wikilink on studio album
"The album is believed to define" → "It is considered to define" since he himself said it
Jazz should not start with capitalisation
Change electronic dance to EDM per earlier comment
The last sentence of the first paragraph is fine, but you should write about the shifts and traditional jazz info in the comp section since it is only mentioned in reception currently
"and
electronic dance which" → "and
EDM which" per the source, as it says the album is "electronic dance music" and that is EDM
"genre experimentation… Wu Hen" → "genre experimentation[...] Wu Hen" since that is how ellipsis are used to cut parts out of quotes
"through Atwood-Ferguson and Bzhezinska's" → "through Miguel Atwood-Ferguson and Alina Bzhezinska's" since it is fine to write full names if directly quoting a source
"from Paul and Mason"." → "from Greg Paul and Quinn Mason."" per
MOS:QUOTE
Mention the lengths of the audio samples on their text
On the first sample, target traditional jazz to
trad jazz
On the second sample, remove the introduction to "Mr. Wu" being a track and target club music to
Electronic dance music
Kyle Peake All the issues should be fixed now, let me know if I missed anything again. Though I had the personnel listed in alphabetical order. 웃
OO03:20, 25 January 2021 (UTC)reply
100cellsman Wow that was quicker than I expected; I fixed some areas where you got somewhat mixed up with copy editing and also resolved a number of issues that arose elsewhere. ✓Pass now, the copyvio score is at around 45% but that is due to a part from the source that is quoted from an entirely different one. --
K. Peake06:39, 25 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Change electronic dance to EDM in the infobox because the source calls the album "
electronic dance music", which is another way of saying the genre EDM
Not done I meant list the genre as EDM
Remove wikilink on studio album
"The album is believed to define" → "It is considered to define" since he himself said it
Jazz should not start with capitalisation
Change electronic dance to EDM per earlier comment
The last sentence of the first paragraph is fine, but you should write about the shifts and traditional jazz info in the comp section since it is only mentioned in reception currently
"and
electronic dance which" → "and
EDM which" per the source, as it says the album is "electronic dance music" and that is EDM
"genre experimentation… Wu Hen" → "genre experimentation[...] Wu Hen" since that is how ellipsis are used to cut parts out of quotes
"through Atwood-Ferguson and Bzhezinska's" → "through Miguel Atwood-Ferguson and Alina Bzhezinska's" since it is fine to write full names if directly quoting a source
"from Paul and Mason"." → "from Greg Paul and Quinn Mason."" per
MOS:QUOTE
Mention the lengths of the audio samples on their text
On the first sample, target traditional jazz to
trad jazz
On the second sample, remove the introduction to "Mr. Wu" being a track and target club music to
Electronic dance music
Kyle Peake All the issues should be fixed now, let me know if I missed anything again. Though I had the personnel listed in alphabetical order. 웃
OO03:20, 25 January 2021 (UTC)reply
100cellsman Wow that was quicker than I expected; I fixed some areas where you got somewhat mixed up with copy editing and also resolved a number of issues that arose elsewhere. ✓Pass now, the copyvio score is at around 45% but that is due to a part from the source that is quoted from an entirely different one. --
K. Peake06:39, 25 January 2021 (UTC)reply