Reviewer:Adam Cuerden (
talk·contribs) 00:53, 18 July 2013 (UTC)
Just a preliminary note before I start: If you're local, do you know there's a plaque about witchtrials just outside of the Edinburgh Castle car park thing (where they make the stands for the festival). Just head east out of that area, and look at the side of - think it's the Camera Obscura building, might be Timberland Tours. Anyway, right at the start of the buildings there. I think it's meant to be a fountain, like a lot f fountains, its not on, though. Adam Cuerden(
talk)00:53, 18 July 2013 (UTC)reply
No problem, but I should say that after tomorrow I will be on a wikibreak and so any changes I cannot done in time will have to wait a week.--SabreBD (
talk)20:00, 30 July 2013 (UTC)reply
"Seventy-five per cent of the accused were women, with over 1,500 executed." - the structure of that implies that there were 1,500 women executed. I don't think that's the intent, but don't want to edit without checking.
It would probably be worth briefly explaining the Commonwealth for those not familiar with the English Civil War. Also, does that entirely count as English occupation? it might be better to be more specific like "occupation by Cromwell's forces during and after the
English Civil War.
"However, these political cases may have been declining in the first half of the sixteenth century.[2] While popular belief in magic was widespread in the Middle Ages, theologians had been generally sceptical, and lawyers only interested in prosecuting cases in which harm from magic was evident, but from the late fifteenth century attitudes changed and witches were seen as deriving powers from the Devil, arguably making witches a form of heresy." A little disjointed, and the "may" is a bit unqualified.
Repeat of an issue in the lead: "Seventy-five per cent of the accused were women, with over 1,500 executed." - the structure of that implies that there were 1,500 women executed. I don't think that's the intent, but don't want to edit without checking.
"Sheriff's courts were re-established and Justices of the Peace returned in 1656" - It might be worth explaining why. This is before the end of the Commonwealth.
"The last recorded executions were in 1706 and the last trial in 1727." It may be worth going into these in slightly more detail, if it's not irrelevant.
The standard of writing in this is pretty good - GA level, certainly, but I'd suggest getting a copyeditor in before going for FA. Nothing too specific or major, it's just a little bit more inelegant in places than it needs to be.
It would probably be worth summarising some of the notable trials. At least one or two, as examples. At the moment, this article lacks any examples whatsoever.
Many thanks for this. I think that this is probably all I can do at the moment, but I will bear in mind some of the suggestions, particularly about examples.--SabreBD (
talk)10:39, 31 July 2013 (UTC)reply
Reviewer:Adam Cuerden (
talk·contribs) 00:53, 18 July 2013 (UTC)
Just a preliminary note before I start: If you're local, do you know there's a plaque about witchtrials just outside of the Edinburgh Castle car park thing (where they make the stands for the festival). Just head east out of that area, and look at the side of - think it's the Camera Obscura building, might be Timberland Tours. Anyway, right at the start of the buildings there. I think it's meant to be a fountain, like a lot f fountains, its not on, though. Adam Cuerden(
talk)00:53, 18 July 2013 (UTC)reply
No problem, but I should say that after tomorrow I will be on a wikibreak and so any changes I cannot done in time will have to wait a week.--SabreBD (
talk)20:00, 30 July 2013 (UTC)reply
"Seventy-five per cent of the accused were women, with over 1,500 executed." - the structure of that implies that there were 1,500 women executed. I don't think that's the intent, but don't want to edit without checking.
It would probably be worth briefly explaining the Commonwealth for those not familiar with the English Civil War. Also, does that entirely count as English occupation? it might be better to be more specific like "occupation by Cromwell's forces during and after the
English Civil War.
"However, these political cases may have been declining in the first half of the sixteenth century.[2] While popular belief in magic was widespread in the Middle Ages, theologians had been generally sceptical, and lawyers only interested in prosecuting cases in which harm from magic was evident, but from the late fifteenth century attitudes changed and witches were seen as deriving powers from the Devil, arguably making witches a form of heresy." A little disjointed, and the "may" is a bit unqualified.
Repeat of an issue in the lead: "Seventy-five per cent of the accused were women, with over 1,500 executed." - the structure of that implies that there were 1,500 women executed. I don't think that's the intent, but don't want to edit without checking.
"Sheriff's courts were re-established and Justices of the Peace returned in 1656" - It might be worth explaining why. This is before the end of the Commonwealth.
"The last recorded executions were in 1706 and the last trial in 1727." It may be worth going into these in slightly more detail, if it's not irrelevant.
The standard of writing in this is pretty good - GA level, certainly, but I'd suggest getting a copyeditor in before going for FA. Nothing too specific or major, it's just a little bit more inelegant in places than it needs to be.
It would probably be worth summarising some of the notable trials. At least one or two, as examples. At the moment, this article lacks any examples whatsoever.
Many thanks for this. I think that this is probably all I can do at the moment, but I will bear in mind some of the suggestions, particularly about examples.--SabreBD (
talk)10:39, 31 July 2013 (UTC)reply