"He was the third generation with the Scottish family name in America and one of the second generation of the family born in America. " I think this is unneeded
"third generation with the family name born in America and the fourth Scottish descendant in America with the Beanes family nam" same... It can probably be inferred
"distinguished scientist with an excellent reputation" is there any substance to this? What does 'scientist' mean here? What about 'excellent reputation?
Given that there's such a paucity of biographical information on Beanes, how would you feel about re-purposing this into an article on the
Writing of the Star Spangled Banner? I don't think it would take much work, mostly the lede, but also understand there's a case to be made for keeping the article as is. Let me know what you think, please. I'm fine either way. Nice work on this interesting topic.
Eddie891TalkWork01:33, 21 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Working Read over your comments and thinking them over now on how to answer each one. Will mark Done after I have addressed each of your comments.--
Doug Coldwell (
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09:57, 21 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Sources look good, but formatting for newspaper articles is wonky. Did you use
Newspapers.com? If so, I recommend adding links to the clippings. Otherwise, they are fine as is
Done - I did not put those in the article. I believe in properly citing news clippings and providing link. I use Newspaper.com alot, as you might have already noticed. Fixed those news references with proper cites where applicable. --
Doug Coldwell (
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19:40, 23 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Earwigs has a pretty high percent, but that looks almost definitely like a mirror
"He was the third generation with the Scottish family name in America and one of the second generation of the family born in America. " I think this is unneeded
"third generation with the family name born in America and the fourth Scottish descendant in America with the Beanes family nam" same... It can probably be inferred
"distinguished scientist with an excellent reputation" is there any substance to this? What does 'scientist' mean here? What about 'excellent reputation?
Given that there's such a paucity of biographical information on Beanes, how would you feel about re-purposing this into an article on the
Writing of the Star Spangled Banner? I don't think it would take much work, mostly the lede, but also understand there's a case to be made for keeping the article as is. Let me know what you think, please. I'm fine either way. Nice work on this interesting topic.
Eddie891TalkWork01:33, 21 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Working Read over your comments and thinking them over now on how to answer each one. Will mark Done after I have addressed each of your comments.--
Doug Coldwell (
talk)
09:57, 21 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Sources look good, but formatting for newspaper articles is wonky. Did you use
Newspapers.com? If so, I recommend adding links to the clippings. Otherwise, they are fine as is
Done - I did not put those in the article. I believe in properly citing news clippings and providing link. I use Newspaper.com alot, as you might have already noticed. Fixed those news references with proper cites where applicable. --
Doug Coldwell (
talk)
19:40, 23 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Earwigs has a pretty high percent, but that looks almost definitely like a mirror