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Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Premise
"a land full of automobiles" I think sentient (or a synonym) should be added in front of automobiles for clarity.
I think
Cycle World should be linked in the prose.
Characters
Why is this section arranged by voice actor instead of character? I think it would be more effective in the opposite order. As is, the protagonist and antagonist are currently lumped into the same bullet point.
Done – I did some "flip-flopping" and separated the protagonist and antagonist.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
Per
WP:PROTAGONIST, Wheelie should be described as the lead or star, not the protagonist.
Done – I used "lead" instead of "protagonist".
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
Production
"Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch premiered nearly one year after the debut of Speed Buggy in 1973" - suggest "Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch premiered in 1973, nearly one year after the debut of Speed Buggy, another Hanna-Barbera cartoon with similar themes.
Done – Took your suggestion.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
I suggest relocating the Broadcast subsection from reception to production and locating it between the current paragraphs. This is in line with FA article
Ed, Edd n Eddy and clarifies that it was still being aired when Bryne's comic was commissioned.
Done – Relocated the section and added appropriate sub-titles.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
" his first "full issue" series of comic books" - what does "full issue" mean? That he did art for the full issue? That he did pencils and inks? Pencils, inks, and scripting?
Done – Removed "full issue" because I believe the sentence (as it is) gives the same effect.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
I think it's worth mentioning the comics were published by
Charlton Comics.
Pass pending responses to concerns listed above.
Argento Surfer (
talk) 20:31, 9 June 2017 (UTC)reply
Argento Surfer – Thank you so much for the review! I changed the article accordingly and left you some comments above. Please let me know if you need any additional information from me. Regards,
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talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
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Argento Surfer (
talk) 15:51, 9 June 2017 (UTC)reply
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Premise
"a land full of automobiles" I think sentient (or a synonym) should be added in front of automobiles for clarity.
I think
Cycle World should be linked in the prose.
Characters
Why is this section arranged by voice actor instead of character? I think it would be more effective in the opposite order. As is, the protagonist and antagonist are currently lumped into the same bullet point.
Done – I did some "flip-flopping" and separated the protagonist and antagonist.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
Per
WP:PROTAGONIST, Wheelie should be described as the lead or star, not the protagonist.
Done – I used "lead" instead of "protagonist".
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
Production
"Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch premiered nearly one year after the debut of Speed Buggy in 1973" - suggest "Wheelie and the Chopper Bunch premiered in 1973, nearly one year after the debut of Speed Buggy, another Hanna-Barbera cartoon with similar themes.
Done – Took your suggestion.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
I suggest relocating the Broadcast subsection from reception to production and locating it between the current paragraphs. This is in line with FA article
Ed, Edd n Eddy and clarifies that it was still being aired when Bryne's comic was commissioned.
Done – Relocated the section and added appropriate sub-titles.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
" his first "full issue" series of comic books" - what does "full issue" mean? That he did art for the full issue? That he did pencils and inks? Pencils, inks, and scripting?
Done – Removed "full issue" because I believe the sentence (as it is) gives the same effect.
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply
I think it's worth mentioning the comics were published by
Charlton Comics.
Pass pending responses to concerns listed above.
Argento Surfer (
talk) 20:31, 9 June 2017 (UTC)reply
Argento Surfer – Thank you so much for the review! I changed the article accordingly and left you some comments above. Please let me know if you need any additional information from me. Regards,
Carbrera (
talk) 20:47, 9 June 2017 (UTC).reply