" It received an 8/8/8/7 score from the Japanese magazine Famitsu Weekly" - the score is uncessecary in the lead, just condense to It received Famitsu's highest rating for a Western-developed title in years
"...to commission Zed Two to develop a sequel. It was the PlayStation 2 launch title Aqua Aqua, which made little alterations to the main gameplay" - these two sentences can easily be merged to improve flow
"Anne Royal of Computer Games Strategy Plus wrote a play-through could end in an instant if even a little bit of control of the chaos is lost" - what does this mean?
It's all European date format, given the fact that it's developer and publisher are from the European nations of the UK and France. Cites introduced in the Legacy section had American dates, so I fixed that.
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Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot)
17:32, 1 January 2022 (UTC)reply
I spotted numerous instances of informal language and some cases where sentences could be merged to improve flow, but nothing too major. It is comprehensive and mostly well written. I'll leave this on hold until the above issues are fixed. ♦
jaguar17:03, 1 January 2022 (UTC)reply
Thank you for addressing them so quickly. I've read through it again and am confident it now meets the GA criteria. Well done! ♦
jaguar00:19, 2 January 2022 (UTC)reply
" It received an 8/8/8/7 score from the Japanese magazine Famitsu Weekly" - the score is uncessecary in the lead, just condense to It received Famitsu's highest rating for a Western-developed title in years
"...to commission Zed Two to develop a sequel. It was the PlayStation 2 launch title Aqua Aqua, which made little alterations to the main gameplay" - these two sentences can easily be merged to improve flow
"Anne Royal of Computer Games Strategy Plus wrote a play-through could end in an instant if even a little bit of control of the chaos is lost" - what does this mean?
It's all European date format, given the fact that it's developer and publisher are from the European nations of the UK and France. Cites introduced in the Legacy section had American dates, so I fixed that.
👨x🐱 (
Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot)
17:32, 1 January 2022 (UTC)reply
I spotted numerous instances of informal language and some cases where sentences could be merged to improve flow, but nothing too major. It is comprehensive and mostly well written. I'll leave this on hold until the above issues are fixed. ♦
jaguar17:03, 1 January 2022 (UTC)reply
Thank you for addressing them so quickly. I've read through it again and am confident it now meets the GA criteria. Well done! ♦
jaguar00:19, 2 January 2022 (UTC)reply