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Reviewer: Gen. Quon ( talk · contribs) 01:29, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
Seeing as how I haven't touched this article, I will review it soon.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:29, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
- This isn't really part of the review, but do you think the addition of a picture would be a good idea? Or no?
- I'm ambivalent. Not entirely sure it would add much as it's just another old white man in a suit, but if you feel it's sufficiently useful then I could find one. GRAPPLE X 03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: Maybe add what the critics enjoyed about him
- Added two quotes to this end. GRAPPLE X 03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: I feel it's a shade bit tiny for this article. Maybe add just a bit more
- Padded it out a little more. How does it look now? GRAPPLE X 03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Body: Should "Conceptual History" and "Character arc" be switched to better match the lede, as well as the whole "Fictional History/Production" model that is used a majority of the articles?
- Switched. GRAPPLE X 01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Concept: Is there any backstory to how he got his name? I alwasy found that a goofy pseudonym...
- None; though it's how he's credited I believe. I assume it's a reference to him being quite aristocratic. GRAPPLE X 01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Character arc: Add ( William B. Davis) after The Smoking Man
- Reception: Italicize The A.V. Club
- Reception: "...genteel - and dangerous..." I know it's part of a quote, but I'd change the dash to a spaced en-dash, or a single em-dash
- Reception: ""It's OK, though. The 'X-Files' gave..." Again, I think it might be best to just italicize to maintain consistency. If this is wrong, then never mind
- References: Just a general question: should titles of newspaper articles et al be capitalized?
- I tend to stick them in title case; if there's any instances where I haven't then I'll do it now. GRAPPLE X 01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- References: On No. 4, maybe specificy somehow that its the movie you're talking about
- References: No. 9 needs a space between "pp." and "95", same with No. 11
- References: Italicize and link The A.V. Club in No. 15
Those are the only things I can really spy.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:55, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
- Also found
this, which positively mentions WMM in the section about CSM.--
Gen. Quon
(Talk)
23:41, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for having a look at this. I've addressed some of these points, will see to the others shortly.
GRAPPLE
X
01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Have included the material from the link you provided as wel. Thanks for reviewing this!
GRAPPLE
X
03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- This looks very good now. I will pass. Congrats!-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:16, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Have included the material from the link you provided as wel. Thanks for reviewing this!
GRAPPLE
X
03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for having a look at this. I've addressed some of these points, will see to the others shortly.
GRAPPLE
X
01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon ( talk · contribs) 01:29, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
Seeing as how I haven't touched this article, I will review it soon.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:29, 25 June 2012 (UTC)
- This isn't really part of the review, but do you think the addition of a picture would be a good idea? Or no?
- I'm ambivalent. Not entirely sure it would add much as it's just another old white man in a suit, but if you feel it's sufficiently useful then I could find one. GRAPPLE X 03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: Maybe add what the critics enjoyed about him
- Added two quotes to this end. GRAPPLE X 03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: I feel it's a shade bit tiny for this article. Maybe add just a bit more
- Padded it out a little more. How does it look now? GRAPPLE X 03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Body: Should "Conceptual History" and "Character arc" be switched to better match the lede, as well as the whole "Fictional History/Production" model that is used a majority of the articles?
- Switched. GRAPPLE X 01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Concept: Is there any backstory to how he got his name? I alwasy found that a goofy pseudonym...
- None; though it's how he's credited I believe. I assume it's a reference to him being quite aristocratic. GRAPPLE X 01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Character arc: Add ( William B. Davis) after The Smoking Man
- Reception: Italicize The A.V. Club
- Reception: "...genteel - and dangerous..." I know it's part of a quote, but I'd change the dash to a spaced en-dash, or a single em-dash
- Reception: ""It's OK, though. The 'X-Files' gave..." Again, I think it might be best to just italicize to maintain consistency. If this is wrong, then never mind
- References: Just a general question: should titles of newspaper articles et al be capitalized?
- I tend to stick them in title case; if there's any instances where I haven't then I'll do it now. GRAPPLE X 01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- References: On No. 4, maybe specificy somehow that its the movie you're talking about
- References: No. 9 needs a space between "pp." and "95", same with No. 11
- References: Italicize and link The A.V. Club in No. 15
Those are the only things I can really spy.-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 00:55, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
- Also found
this, which positively mentions WMM in the section about CSM.--
Gen. Quon
(Talk)
23:41, 26 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for having a look at this. I've addressed some of these points, will see to the others shortly.
GRAPPLE
X
01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Have included the material from the link you provided as wel. Thanks for reviewing this!
GRAPPLE
X
03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- This looks very good now. I will pass. Congrats!-- Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:16, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Have included the material from the link you provided as wel. Thanks for reviewing this!
GRAPPLE
X
03:01, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for having a look at this. I've addressed some of these points, will see to the others shortly.
GRAPPLE
X
01:00, 27 June 2012 (UTC)