These producers included Stargate, RedOne and personnel from Jay-Z's label, Roc Nation, which they had signed to in April 2009 --> These producers included Stargate, RedOne and personnel from Jay-Z's record label Roc Nation, which they signed a record deal with in April 2009.
Fixed. I don't know why I put that there lol.
Till
How about some more background information? Surely there should be information about Keisha being kicked out of the group. The song was originally recorded with her, and the new one re-recorded her vocals, right?
He elaborated, "There's something depressing about a pop song which wears the formula for great pop songs quite as transparently as this does." --> Colon, not comma. And period outside quotation marks.
These producers included Stargate, RedOne and personnel from Jay-Z's label, Roc Nation, which they had signed to in April 2009 --> These producers included Stargate, RedOne and personnel from Jay-Z's record label Roc Nation, which they signed a record deal with in April 2009.
Fixed. I don't know why I put that there lol.
Till
How about some more background information? Surely there should be information about Keisha being kicked out of the group. The song was originally recorded with her, and the new one re-recorded her vocals, right?
He elaborated, "There's something depressing about a pop song which wears the formula for great pop songs quite as transparently as this does." --> Colon, not comma. And period outside quotation marks.