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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger ( talk · contribs) 02:43, 6 August 2013 (UTC) reply

I'll do this review.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 02:43, 6 August 2013 (UTC) reply

WP:LEAD

• It seems to me that one of the most important things about this subject is it becoming a NHL and NHRP. These dates should be in the LEAD.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 03:07, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
  • Done. Magic ♪piano 16:14, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
• The lead almost makes it seem like he used it as a summer retreat.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 02:23, 9 August 2013 (UTC) reply
  • I've rephrased that part. Magic ♪piano 17:17, 9 August 2013 (UTC) reply

History

• The second sentence is very convoluted in the sense that who seems to refer to family.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 03:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
  • Reworded. Magic ♪piano 16:14, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
• Why does the LEAD mention use as a summer retreat that is omited in the main body?-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 03:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
  • "Du Bois developed plans to transform the property into a middle-class summer retreat,..." Magic ♪piano 15:47, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply

• Is it possible to produce a map of this sight.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 03:39, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
  • I don't believe I've seen a map of the grounds, although I might be able to reproduce one in Inkscape based on an annotated aerial photo in one of the sources. Magic ♪piano 14:43, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
    • That would be helpful.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 02:18, 9 August 2013 (UTC) reply
      • Added a site map. Magic ♪piano 17:17, 9 August 2013 (UTC) reply

• All three images and WP:CAPTIONs are fine.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 03:39, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply

• I am putting this on hold. The issues are minor.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 03:46, 8 August 2013 (UTC) reply
  • Thanks for your efforts. I am now PASSING this article.-- TonyTheTiger ( T/ C/ WP:FOUR/ WP:CHICAGO/ WP:WAWARD) 18:11, 9 August 2013 (UTC) reply