GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: Jaguar ( talk · contribs) 21:49, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
I'll take this, though right off the bat I must express concern with the length of the lead. It does not summarise the article as a single sentence and is in great need of expanding. ♦
jaguar
21:49, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
( edit conflict) @ FunkMonk: I've just read through the article and could only raise two minor points:
The article is comprehensive, readable for someone unfamiliar like me and consistently well-written. It is also adequately sourced and structured, meeting the GA criteria. I would have passed this outright had it not been for the lead, however. Per WP:LEAD, the lead must summarise the article and with it standing as a single sentence unfortunately holds it back from meeting all parts of the GA criteria. I will leave this on hold until that part is addressed, after that this will definitely be good to go. The shortness of this review demonstrates the good job you've done with this! ♦ jaguar 22:12, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (
|
visual edit |
history) ·
Article talk (
|
history) ·
Watch
Reviewer: Jaguar ( talk · contribs) 21:49, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
I'll take this, though right off the bat I must express concern with the length of the lead. It does not summarise the article as a single sentence and is in great need of expanding. ♦
jaguar
21:49, 29 September 2021 (UTC)
( edit conflict) @ FunkMonk: I've just read through the article and could only raise two minor points:
The article is comprehensive, readable for someone unfamiliar like me and consistently well-written. It is also adequately sourced and structured, meeting the GA criteria. I would have passed this outright had it not been for the lead, however. Per WP:LEAD, the lead must summarise the article and with it standing as a single sentence unfortunately holds it back from meeting all parts of the GA criteria. I will leave this on hold until that part is addressed, after that this will definitely be good to go. The shortness of this review demonstrates the good job you've done with this! ♦ jaguar 22:12, 29 September 2021 (UTC)