The prose needs to be better. Shouldn't "that has the symbol" be "that is represented by the symbol"? "was (incorrectly) suggested" – The brackets are unnecessary. Please give the entire article a run-through. Gary King (
talk)22:28, 31 January 2009 (UTC)reply
Is the article using American or British spelling? "stabilises" is British, with the "s" in "ses", while "analyzing" is American, with the "z" in "zing".
"his claim of discovery four" – to clarify, as it isn't really all that clear what he claimed otherwise. Technically he didn't claim anything, just discovered.
There are a lot of small paragraphs. Can you merge them (logically) so that they flow better?
Can you narrow down the number of images in the article? Free images are good, yes, but sometimes it's possible to go overboard with too many. Choose the ones that are most appropriate, and the rest can be left to a link to a Commons page. All four images in the gallery, for instance, is that necessary?
Merged several of the small paragraphes and reduced the number of images! Now better? The gallery was really a little to much. --
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20:22, 4 February 2009 (UTC)reply
The prose needs to be better. Shouldn't "that has the symbol" be "that is represented by the symbol"? "was (incorrectly) suggested" – The brackets are unnecessary. Please give the entire article a run-through. Gary King (
talk)22:28, 31 January 2009 (UTC)reply
Is the article using American or British spelling? "stabilises" is British, with the "s" in "ses", while "analyzing" is American, with the "z" in "zing".
"his claim of discovery four" – to clarify, as it isn't really all that clear what he claimed otherwise. Technically he didn't claim anything, just discovered.
There are a lot of small paragraphs. Can you merge them (logically) so that they flow better?
Can you narrow down the number of images in the article? Free images are good, yes, but sometimes it's possible to go overboard with too many. Choose the ones that are most appropriate, and the rest can be left to a link to a Commons page. All four images in the gallery, for instance, is that necessary?
Merged several of the small paragraphes and reduced the number of images! Now better? The gallery was really a little to much. --
Stone (
talk)
20:22, 4 February 2009 (UTC)reply