Reviewer:Aircorn (
talk·contribs) 01:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
Will review this over the next few days
AIRcorn(talk) 01:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
So far the prose is excellent. I have one suggestion from the first section, but otherwise I like what I am reading. I may make slight, uncontroversial changes as I go. Feel free to revert if you disagree with any of them.
AIRcorn(talk)01:32, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Flying Lotus subsequently began planning new music. This seems unfinished and I am not sure exactly what point it is trying to get across. As a music producer it seems self explanatory (I would think the reverse would be more notable) and I am not sure why it is relevant to the article on this album
Thundercats role in this album is not made obvious in this section, despite getting a reasonable introduction. I am wondering if the previous sentence is supposed to end "...with Thundercat"?
I am not sure about
File:Sasha3.jpg. It says we have permission to use it, but doesn't link to any permission. It seems to be of another DJ anyway so is probably not that vital to the article (plus it doesn't actually give any evidence that it is an Ableton Live sequencer). The rest seem fine.
I replaced the image with one of a drum kit setup, and a couple of digital tools, including a labtop running the sequencer program (screenshots of Ableton Live check out with the one in the image, albeit a bit to the far end of the image).
Dan56 (
talk)
10:59, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Reviewer:Aircorn (
talk·contribs) 01:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
Will review this over the next few days
AIRcorn(talk) 01:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
So far the prose is excellent. I have one suggestion from the first section, but otherwise I like what I am reading. I may make slight, uncontroversial changes as I go. Feel free to revert if you disagree with any of them.
AIRcorn(talk)01:32, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Flying Lotus subsequently began planning new music. This seems unfinished and I am not sure exactly what point it is trying to get across. As a music producer it seems self explanatory (I would think the reverse would be more notable) and I am not sure why it is relevant to the article on this album
Thundercats role in this album is not made obvious in this section, despite getting a reasonable introduction. I am wondering if the previous sentence is supposed to end "...with Thundercat"?
I am not sure about
File:Sasha3.jpg. It says we have permission to use it, but doesn't link to any permission. It seems to be of another DJ anyway so is probably not that vital to the article (plus it doesn't actually give any evidence that it is an Ableton Live sequencer). The rest seem fine.
I replaced the image with one of a drum kit setup, and a couple of digital tools, including a labtop running the sequencer program (screenshots of Ableton Live check out with the one in the image, albeit a bit to the far end of the image).
Dan56 (
talk)
10:59, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply