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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 08:56, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Could you action the relevant comments from
Talk:USS Admiralty Islands/GA1 and
Talk:USS Bougainville (CVE-100)/GA1. Once that is done, I'll take a look.
Peacemaker67 (
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08:59, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
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Done
Stikkyy
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17:21, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- forth→fourth in the lead, but in the body it says twenty-third?
- suggest "fought
in supportas part of the Guadalcanal campaign" - launchedin
- say what Operation Magic Carpet was
- her wl isn't in the body
- link=on for the power conversion to link kW
- the install
mentation - Bofors 40-millimeter
s(1.6 in) anti-aircraft guns, by adj=on in the conversion - 20-mm and 40-mm
- link Clarence Ekstrom and add to the infobox as a notable commander
- 3rd Fleet? I thought US fleets were spelled ou, ie Third Fleet? Also 7th
- "island of Peleliu
, ofin the Palau Islands" - say where Manus Island is
- "She, accompanied
withby eighteen" - link capital ship
AdmiralKurita- say Kossol Roads is at Palau
- the landing craft
s - suggest "sinking Savo Island's sister Ommaney Bay"
- suggest "Savo Island's sister Manila Bay
- plane
beingbegan trailing - say Ulithi is in the Caroline Islands
- suggest "Savo Island's sister Kitkun Bay
- suggest "along with her sisters Marcus Island and Saginaw Bay"
- suggest "traded for her sister Makin Island's"
- Ooccupation of Japan
- link "Operation Magic Carpet" where you first use "Magic Carpet" in the body
- use the link for Boston Harbor, then link Boston when you get to "Boston group"
- suggest adding that Clarence Ekstrom was awarded the Navy Cross for his extraordinary heroism and distinguished service in command of the ship during the Battle of Leyte Gulf
- Rielly is unused
- ShipbuildingHistory.com and Hazegray.org are marginally acceptable at GA, but I wouldn't be relying on them at Milhist ACR or FAC
That's all I have, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 08:37, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- @ Peacemaker67: I've addressed your points, apart from the fact that ship infoboxes appear to not have a parameter for listing commanders. Stikkyy t/ c 22:08, 19 April 2020 (UTC)
- My mistake, I've asked at the template talk page. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 04:07, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 08:56, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Could you action the relevant comments from
Talk:USS Admiralty Islands/GA1 and
Talk:USS Bougainville (CVE-100)/GA1. Once that is done, I'll take a look.
Peacemaker67 (
click to talk to me)
08:59, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
- @
Peacemaker67: Done
Stikkyy
t/
c
17:21, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:
- forth→fourth in the lead, but in the body it says twenty-third?
- suggest "fought
in supportas part of the Guadalcanal campaign" - launchedin
- say what Operation Magic Carpet was
- her wl isn't in the body
- link=on for the power conversion to link kW
- the install
mentation - Bofors 40-millimeter
s(1.6 in) anti-aircraft guns, by adj=on in the conversion - 20-mm and 40-mm
- link Clarence Ekstrom and add to the infobox as a notable commander
- 3rd Fleet? I thought US fleets were spelled ou, ie Third Fleet? Also 7th
- "island of Peleliu
, ofin the Palau Islands" - say where Manus Island is
- "She, accompanied
withby eighteen" - link capital ship
AdmiralKurita- say Kossol Roads is at Palau
- the landing craft
s - suggest "sinking Savo Island's sister Ommaney Bay"
- suggest "Savo Island's sister Manila Bay
- plane
beingbegan trailing - say Ulithi is in the Caroline Islands
- suggest "Savo Island's sister Kitkun Bay
- suggest "along with her sisters Marcus Island and Saginaw Bay"
- suggest "traded for her sister Makin Island's"
- Ooccupation of Japan
- link "Operation Magic Carpet" where you first use "Magic Carpet" in the body
- use the link for Boston Harbor, then link Boston when you get to "Boston group"
- suggest adding that Clarence Ekstrom was awarded the Navy Cross for his extraordinary heroism and distinguished service in command of the ship during the Battle of Leyte Gulf
- Rielly is unused
- ShipbuildingHistory.com and Hazegray.org are marginally acceptable at GA, but I wouldn't be relying on them at Milhist ACR or FAC
That's all I have, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 08:37, 18 April 2020 (UTC)
- @ Peacemaker67: I've addressed your points, apart from the fact that ship infoboxes appear to not have a parameter for listing commanders. Stikkyy t/ c 22:08, 19 April 2020 (UTC)
- My mistake, I've asked at the template talk page. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 04:07, 20 April 2020 (UTC)