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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 ( talk · contribs) 04:09, 7 May 2019 (UTC) reply

This article is on good shape. I have a few comments:

• in the lead, should it be "escalation clause"? My understanding is that escalator refers to moving stairs?
  • It's pretty frequently referred to as the "escalator clause" (frequently in quotes) - see for instance here, here, and here.
• in the lead, suggest Congressional refusal to authorise larger battleships"
  • Good idea
• in the lead, suggest a new sentence "Overcrowding was exacerbated by wartime modifications that considerably strengthened their anti-aircraft batteries and significantly increased their crews."
  • Works for me
• month to month ranges use an unspaced endash eg June – September should be June–September
  • Good catch
• if it is necessary to use LT, it should be introduced first
  • Do you mean with a link? Ships during the treaty system (and since, as far as I know) routinely used long tons, as that was what the treaties specified
• suggest "2,500. officers and enlisted"
  • Done
• state in the body that the 20 mm mounts were single mounts
  • Done
• rounding difference between body and infobox for the turret armour
  • Fixed

More to come. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 04:09, 7 May 2019 (UTC) reply

• quad is a bit colloquial, suggest using quadruple throughout
  • Yeah, I was hoping to avoid the repetition of "quadruple mount"
• link ship commissioning
  • Done
• I take it Alabama was not the flagship of TF 61?
  • Curiously, that was the cruiser Tuscaloosa - you'd think he'd have wanted one of the battleships, since they had been built specifically as flagships and a 35,000-ton battleship probably weathers the North Atlantic better than a 10,000-ton cruiser.
• when it says "The fleet then returned to Majuro" do you mean task group? There is another instance of this.
  • No, all of TF 38/58
• ranks for the Japanese admirals?
  • Added
• "before South Dakota and the rest of TF 34" should this be Alabama?
  • Indeed
• link Kyushu
  • Done
• link USS Indiana and Massachusetts
  • Done
• link Kamaishi, Iwate
  • Done
• "the longest tow of a vessel"
  • Whoops
• do we know the source of File:ONI identification image South Dakota class battleship.jpg?
  • Added a link
• do we know the source of the information on File:Leyte map annotated.jpg?
  • Don't feel like bothering to poke the uploader, so I'll replace it with the essentially identical official US Army drawing from Dougie Mac's report on the campaign

That's all I have, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 07:39, 7 May 2019 (UTC) reply

Thanks PM! Parsecboy ( talk) 12:39, 7 May 2019 (UTC) reply

This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work! Peacemaker67 ( click to talk to me) 22:51, 7 May 2019 (UTC) reply