I'll take on this review. I split issues up into major and basic. Major are GA criteria based which could be grounds for quick failure or discussion. Basic is usually copy editing and other issues to satisfy the GA criteria.
AmericanAir88(
talk)19:47, 12 September 2019 (UTC)reply
"Before then, it was a southern extension of Arizona State Route 95 and made up the first segments of the highway ever commissioned by the state."
Rework the sentence as it is vague and doesn't flow correctly.
"The highway goes almost perfectly straight north"
Needs a better word than "perfectly"
"Immediately north of Gadsden, US 95 curves east, then immediately north..."
Repetitive use of immediately
"Entering, Yuma,"
The first comma is not needed
"until it was replaced in 1968.."
What replaced it?
"US 95 continues north through the Yuma Proving Ground, passing the access road for the Laguna Dam and the Laguna Army Airfield as well as the General Motors Desert Proving Ground. "
Make it read more like a comma list rather than using "and"/"as well as"
"...cities of Yuma, San Luis and Quartzsite."
Comma after San Luis
"more hazardous"
What made it so hazardous?
"during the Mexican–American War and..."
Comma after "War"
"By 1939"
Comma after 1939
The references need to be in proper order: [13][14][3] should be [3][13][14]
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AmericanAir88: Thanks for showing the above issues. I made sure to correct them as needed given your feedback and suggestions. I hope we can work together on more articles in the future too, because I really like your reviewing style! -
MatthewAnderson707 (
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sandbox)
20:43, 13 September 2019 (UTC)reply
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MatthewAnderson707: I appreciate the comments. I'll definitely take a look at more articles with you. Sorry for the late response, I've been quite busy on and off the wiki. I'll take a second look at this article later today.
AmericanAir88(
talk)20:50, 17 September 2019 (UTC)reply
Reference 5 does not link to a specific source. Either reroute the url to the correct passage or find other sources for it.
"This new highway was one of Arizona's first state highways. After the passage of the Federal Aid Highway Act of 1921, the western section of the Borderland Highway was renamed the Yuma–Phoenix Highway"
Unsourced unless Reference 5's real link covers it
I'll take on this review. I split issues up into major and basic. Major are GA criteria based which could be grounds for quick failure or discussion. Basic is usually copy editing and other issues to satisfy the GA criteria.
AmericanAir88(
talk)19:47, 12 September 2019 (UTC)reply
"Before then, it was a southern extension of Arizona State Route 95 and made up the first segments of the highway ever commissioned by the state."
Rework the sentence as it is vague and doesn't flow correctly.
"The highway goes almost perfectly straight north"
Needs a better word than "perfectly"
"Immediately north of Gadsden, US 95 curves east, then immediately north..."
Repetitive use of immediately
"Entering, Yuma,"
The first comma is not needed
"until it was replaced in 1968.."
What replaced it?
"US 95 continues north through the Yuma Proving Ground, passing the access road for the Laguna Dam and the Laguna Army Airfield as well as the General Motors Desert Proving Ground. "
Make it read more like a comma list rather than using "and"/"as well as"
"...cities of Yuma, San Luis and Quartzsite."
Comma after San Luis
"more hazardous"
What made it so hazardous?
"during the Mexican–American War and..."
Comma after "War"
"By 1939"
Comma after 1939
The references need to be in proper order: [13][14][3] should be [3][13][14]
@
AmericanAir88: Thanks for showing the above issues. I made sure to correct them as needed given your feedback and suggestions. I hope we can work together on more articles in the future too, because I really like your reviewing style! -
MatthewAnderson707 (
talk|
sandbox)
20:43, 13 September 2019 (UTC)reply
@
MatthewAnderson707: I appreciate the comments. I'll definitely take a look at more articles with you. Sorry for the late response, I've been quite busy on and off the wiki. I'll take a second look at this article later today.
AmericanAir88(
talk)20:50, 17 September 2019 (UTC)reply
Reference 5 does not link to a specific source. Either reroute the url to the correct passage or find other sources for it.
"This new highway was one of Arizona's first state highways. After the passage of the Federal Aid Highway Act of 1921, the western section of the Borderland Highway was renamed the Yuma–Phoenix Highway"
Unsourced unless Reference 5's real link covers it