The writing's generally excellent. Just a couple questions, though. Unless I'm missing something, this makes no sense: After attaining tropical storm status, significant intensification was limited due to a slight increase in wind shear as well as impeded outflow.[11] The slowing of the weakening trend was temporary, and by early on April 16 the organization had rapidly improved.[12] Also, in the sentence, The ship they were on had sank, and the crew clung to debris and made makeshift rafts to survive in the waters, "...had sank..."? I don't think that's correct grammar, but I'm not positive.
Excellent work! Just a couple questions, which could just be my being stupid. It passes. Cheers!
JuliancoltonTropicalCyclone 02:28, 12 June 2008 (UTC)reply
The writing's generally excellent. Just a couple questions, though. Unless I'm missing something, this makes no sense: After attaining tropical storm status, significant intensification was limited due to a slight increase in wind shear as well as impeded outflow.[11] The slowing of the weakening trend was temporary, and by early on April 16 the organization had rapidly improved.[12] Also, in the sentence, The ship they were on had sank, and the crew clung to debris and made makeshift rafts to survive in the waters, "...had sank..."? I don't think that's correct grammar, but I'm not positive.
Excellent work! Just a couple questions, which could just be my being stupid. It passes. Cheers!
JuliancoltonTropicalCyclone 02:28, 12 June 2008 (UTC)reply