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Reviewer: Usernameunique ( talk · contribs) 04:58, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
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Category 4 typhoon— Is this ever stated in the article?
Lead
high winds across the Philippines blew ash— Blew ash where?
Currencies can be converted— Can be, or are?
the typhoon was responsible for 136 lives— Again, including the missing?
Meteorological history
both the JTWC and JMA agreed that Amy attained its peak intensity— perhaps "reported that"?
Impact
the airport— Presumably the airport has a name and a Wikipedia article that can be linked?
Volcanic debris from Mount Pinatubo's slopes loosened by heavy rain destroyed approximately 500 houses near the banks of rivers— I'm a little unclear here about how this happened. The debris tumbled down the slopes and slammed into the houses? But if so, why does it matter that they were by rivers?
460 t (510 short tons)— Inconsistent abbreviation.
Emerald capsized, resulting in ... two others missing. In the Taiwan Strait, a Cypriot ship Blue River with 31 crew members on board vanished in high seas. None of the crew survived.— Why are those who weren't recovered from Emerald described as "missing", while those who weren't recovered from Blue River are described as dead?
two fisherman were presumed dead after drowning in high waves— After they drowned, they were presumed dead? What a shocking presumption.
Typhoon Amy became the strongest typhoon to hit Guandong in 22 years— Does the previous one have a name/article?
20 t (22 short tons)— Inconsistent abbreviation.
a peak storm total of 103.5 mm (4.07 in),— a peak storm total of 103.5 mm (4.07 in) what?
Ferry service from Hong Kong to Shantou was cancelled.— For how long?
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Reviewer: Usernameunique ( talk · contribs) 04:58, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
Infobox
Category 4 typhoon— Is this ever stated in the article?
Lead
high winds across the Philippines blew ash— Blew ash where?
Currencies can be converted— Can be, or are?
the typhoon was responsible for 136 lives— Again, including the missing?
Meteorological history
both the JTWC and JMA agreed that Amy attained its peak intensity— perhaps "reported that"?
Impact
the airport— Presumably the airport has a name and a Wikipedia article that can be linked?
Volcanic debris from Mount Pinatubo's slopes loosened by heavy rain destroyed approximately 500 houses near the banks of rivers— I'm a little unclear here about how this happened. The debris tumbled down the slopes and slammed into the houses? But if so, why does it matter that they were by rivers?
460 t (510 short tons)— Inconsistent abbreviation.
Emerald capsized, resulting in ... two others missing. In the Taiwan Strait, a Cypriot ship Blue River with 31 crew members on board vanished in high seas. None of the crew survived.— Why are those who weren't recovered from Emerald described as "missing", while those who weren't recovered from Blue River are described as dead?
two fisherman were presumed dead after drowning in high waves— After they drowned, they were presumed dead? What a shocking presumption.
Typhoon Amy became the strongest typhoon to hit Guandong in 22 years— Does the previous one have a name/article?
20 t (22 short tons)— Inconsistent abbreviation.
a peak storm total of 103.5 mm (4.07 in),— a peak storm total of 103.5 mm (4.07 in) what?
Ferry service from Hong Kong to Shantou was cancelled.— For how long?
Overall