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Typhoon Alice was a typhoon that bought severe flooding to Guam during the 1953 Pacific typhoon season.I get that you want to relate the storm to the season, but I don't think this timeframe is specific enough since the season encompasses the whole year.
and JTWC reported that the storm had intensified to 65 knots (75 mph; 120 km/h), equivalent to a Category 1 typhoon on the Saffir–Simpson scale, one day laterThis should be split off into its own sentence. The time should be moved to the beginning of the sentence.
Northwest of Guam, the typhoon traveled northeastwards, reaching its peak of 100 kn (115 mph; 185 km/h) late on October 18 near Iwo JimaTwo locations in the same sentence don't bode well.
Alice then steadily weakened, down to a tropical storm on October 20You need a present participle rather than an adverb for this and any appropriate adjustments.
by reconnaissance flightsWho did these flights?
historic western north Pacific tropical cyclone record"the" before this?
just not observed--> but were not observed
Alice began to steadily weaken later that day, toYou need more than a preposition here
typhoon strength to 60 kn (70 mph; 110 km/h)same thing here
As Alice traveled near the International Date Line (IDL), the storm had weakened to 35 kn (40 mph; 65 km/h) at 18:00 UTC--> Alice traveled near the International Date Line (IDL) and had weakened to 35 kn (40 mph; 65 km/h) at 18:00 UTC...
was also recorded on the islandshould be were since it is two items.
three to four feet (0.91 to 1.22 m)"3 to 4" so US numbers are consistently displayed in the article. There are more occurrences of this.
500 yards (460 m)Should be ft here for consistency
The fourth death was a farmer dying from a heart attack in his pasture during the storm, who had been previously reported as drowned.This seems a little clunky. The last tidbit could be sectioned off with a semi colon instead of a comma
winds of 70 mph (110 km/h) were reported on the islandsustained winds?
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Moved to mainspace by Nova Crystallis ( talk). Self-nominated at 21:37, 20 November 2020 (UTC).
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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah ( talk · contribs) 22:45, 8 December 2020 (UTC)
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Noah
Talk 22:45, 8 December 2020 (UTC)
Typhoon Alice was a typhoon that bought severe flooding to Guam during the 1953 Pacific typhoon season.I get that you want to relate the storm to the season, but I don't think this timeframe is specific enough since the season encompasses the whole year.
and JTWC reported that the storm had intensified to 65 knots (75 mph; 120 km/h), equivalent to a Category 1 typhoon on the Saffir–Simpson scale, one day laterThis should be split off into its own sentence. The time should be moved to the beginning of the sentence.
Northwest of Guam, the typhoon traveled northeastwards, reaching its peak of 100 kn (115 mph; 185 km/h) late on October 18 near Iwo JimaTwo locations in the same sentence don't bode well.
Alice then steadily weakened, down to a tropical storm on October 20You need a present participle rather than an adverb for this and any appropriate adjustments.
by reconnaissance flightsWho did these flights?
historic western north Pacific tropical cyclone record"the" before this?
just not observed--> but were not observed
Alice began to steadily weaken later that day, toYou need more than a preposition here
typhoon strength to 60 kn (70 mph; 110 km/h)same thing here
As Alice traveled near the International Date Line (IDL), the storm had weakened to 35 kn (40 mph; 65 km/h) at 18:00 UTC--> Alice traveled near the International Date Line (IDL) and had weakened to 35 kn (40 mph; 65 km/h) at 18:00 UTC...
was also recorded on the islandshould be were since it is two items.
three to four feet (0.91 to 1.22 m)"3 to 4" so US numbers are consistently displayed in the article. There are more occurrences of this.
500 yards (460 m)Should be ft here for consistency
The fourth death was a farmer dying from a heart attack in his pasture during the storm, who had been previously reported as drowned.This seems a little clunky. The last tidbit could be sectioned off with a semi colon instead of a comma
winds of 70 mph (110 km/h) were reported on the islandsustained winds?