Bishop of Bosnia Peregrin Saxon comma after Bosnia
Tvrtko was forcing Vuk southwards forced
Lord of Zeta George I, comma after Zeta
Louis of Hungary, rose to protect the cities "rose" is awkward, rephrase
counter Nicholas.[20] His complete defeat The start of the latter sentence here is also awkward. Maybe "He was defeated during"...
Tvrtko and George of Zeta, since the latter seized coastal župas which Tvrtko had expected to annex. Explain how George managed to seize the zupas
plotted with Travunians the takeover of Trebinje, Konavli and Dračevica, finalizing his conquest of Serbian lands. Awkward, also missing a "the" in front of Serbian.
I saw this list only after my extensive copy-editing just completed. I've gone back and addressed the usage issues raised here (those not already coincidentally addressed during my copy-edit), except for the the reference to Tvrtko as the "elder", not "eldest", of two brothers, which is correct in that context, and even slightly more informative. However, I can see how "eldest" might be preferred, as such usage in all contexts is more familiar to me as a native American.
Dhtwiki (
talk)
01:22, 23 April 2017 (UTC)reply
Comment
Hi. This review is standing at 86 days old as I type this. Although there is some recent activity here and
Sturmvogel 66 is a more than capable reviewer I am willing to offer my services as a second opinion on anything if it is needed to advance this.
AIRcorn(talk)07:39, 30 April 2017 (UTC)reply
Aircorn, I think the primary issue at the moment is that the nominator,
Surtsicna, has not edited on Wikipedia for over five weeks now. (I've just marked a DYK nomination of Surtsicna's for closure that has been waiting for that long.) I would imagine that what this primarily needs is someone to address the issues raised in the review.
BlueMoonset (
talk)
00:36, 1 May 2017 (UTC)reply
Well, if Surtsicna is ready to go to work and Aircorn is willing to take over the review, the review could just continue at this time. Otherwise, perhaps putting it back into the pool is best.
Surtsicna,
Aircorn, it's up to you what happens next.
BlueMoonset (
talk)
17:24, 13 June 2017 (UTC)reply
In doing a cleanup of the abandoned reviews I noticed this one. Clearly Sturm's long gone at this point, and everything has been addressed. I don't see any further issues with the article, so I'm stepping in and passing it.
Wizardman21:10, 29 July 2017 (UTC)reply
Bishop of Bosnia Peregrin Saxon comma after Bosnia
Tvrtko was forcing Vuk southwards forced
Lord of Zeta George I, comma after Zeta
Louis of Hungary, rose to protect the cities "rose" is awkward, rephrase
counter Nicholas.[20] His complete defeat The start of the latter sentence here is also awkward. Maybe "He was defeated during"...
Tvrtko and George of Zeta, since the latter seized coastal župas which Tvrtko had expected to annex. Explain how George managed to seize the zupas
plotted with Travunians the takeover of Trebinje, Konavli and Dračevica, finalizing his conquest of Serbian lands. Awkward, also missing a "the" in front of Serbian.
I saw this list only after my extensive copy-editing just completed. I've gone back and addressed the usage issues raised here (those not already coincidentally addressed during my copy-edit), except for the the reference to Tvrtko as the "elder", not "eldest", of two brothers, which is correct in that context, and even slightly more informative. However, I can see how "eldest" might be preferred, as such usage in all contexts is more familiar to me as a native American.
Dhtwiki (
talk)
01:22, 23 April 2017 (UTC)reply
Comment
Hi. This review is standing at 86 days old as I type this. Although there is some recent activity here and
Sturmvogel 66 is a more than capable reviewer I am willing to offer my services as a second opinion on anything if it is needed to advance this.
AIRcorn(talk)07:39, 30 April 2017 (UTC)reply
Aircorn, I think the primary issue at the moment is that the nominator,
Surtsicna, has not edited on Wikipedia for over five weeks now. (I've just marked a DYK nomination of Surtsicna's for closure that has been waiting for that long.) I would imagine that what this primarily needs is someone to address the issues raised in the review.
BlueMoonset (
talk)
00:36, 1 May 2017 (UTC)reply
Well, if Surtsicna is ready to go to work and Aircorn is willing to take over the review, the review could just continue at this time. Otherwise, perhaps putting it back into the pool is best.
Surtsicna,
Aircorn, it's up to you what happens next.
BlueMoonset (
talk)
17:24, 13 June 2017 (UTC)reply
In doing a cleanup of the abandoned reviews I noticed this one. Clearly Sturm's long gone at this point, and everything has been addressed. I don't see any further issues with the article, so I'm stepping in and passing it.
Wizardman21:10, 29 July 2017 (UTC)reply