That there is so little evidence the craft existed (a few vague letters) needs to be mentioned earlier.
The drawings need further explanation in the text. The image on the left is of a drawing made by Lieutenant Commander Francis Barber in 1875 from a description in a letter from Benjamin Gale to Silas Deane. The right hand image, I know less about. It appears to come from an 1801 magazine by the American Philosophical Society but is presented in this article as contemporary. Without this knowledge, one is left wondering why the two drawings are so different.
The image "Destruction of a British tender by a torpedo" is not explained in the text contrary to 6b The explosion occured when the British seamen brought the mines on board and began tampering with them, and therefore the article calls this attempt a failure but without the full story, it sounds more like a success.
Neither am I convinced the article is focussed. It spends too much time discussing attempted attacks by mines and torpedoes in which the Turtle wasn't used. Is this article about Turtle or is it about early underwater warfare in general?
It is fine (in fact expected) for the opener of an individual GA reassessment to close it. Let me know if you need any help with the technical side of things.
AIRcorn(talk)08:29, 7 February 2019 (UTC)reply
That there is so little evidence the craft existed (a few vague letters) needs to be mentioned earlier.
The drawings need further explanation in the text. The image on the left is of a drawing made by Lieutenant Commander Francis Barber in 1875 from a description in a letter from Benjamin Gale to Silas Deane. The right hand image, I know less about. It appears to come from an 1801 magazine by the American Philosophical Society but is presented in this article as contemporary. Without this knowledge, one is left wondering why the two drawings are so different.
The image "Destruction of a British tender by a torpedo" is not explained in the text contrary to 6b The explosion occured when the British seamen brought the mines on board and began tampering with them, and therefore the article calls this attempt a failure but without the full story, it sounds more like a success.
Neither am I convinced the article is focussed. It spends too much time discussing attempted attacks by mines and torpedoes in which the Turtle wasn't used. Is this article about Turtle or is it about early underwater warfare in general?
It is fine (in fact expected) for the opener of an individual GA reassessment to close it. Let me know if you need any help with the technical side of things.
AIRcorn(talk)08:29, 7 February 2019 (UTC)reply