"Tropical Storm Thelma (also known as Tropical Storm Uring in the Philippines) was the deadliest tropical cyclone in Philippine history, killing at least 5,081 people." link to
History of the Philippines.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Outside of Ormoc City, a further 159 people were killed across Leyte and Negros Occidental. " no need for "futher" since you mention it is outside of the city IMO.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"A total of $5.8 million worth of grants and materials was provided collectively in the international relief effort" was to wore here, right?
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"On November 4, both the JTWC and JMA upgraded the system to a tropical storm, with the latter assigning it the name Thelma.[3][4]" link to
tropical cyclone naming.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"The hardest hit region was Leyte where more than 4,000 people lost their lives." comma before "where".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"A total of 598,454 people were affected by the storm across the Philippines.[11] An estimated 43,000 people were left homeless.[12]" mind combing these sentences.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Altogether, the rains were twice as heavy as the land could handle and the many landslips doubled the volume of fluids.[16]" no need for "the" after "and".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Roughly 2,500 people lived on this reclaimed land prior to the flood. The majority of fatalities took place along the banks of the river, with most drowning or being buried in mud or debris." I'd combine this to sentences with something like ";consequentially".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
That would create a misleading statement which would imply that the majority (though somehow less than half) took place along that reclaimed land. Opting not to do this.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)reply
Where does Thelma fall in the deadlist typhoons. There should at least be a template of that.
Our template isn't up-to-snuff. From what I can tell, it's not in the top ten.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)reply
In the aftermath, cut back on the uses of "by [insert date]".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
Not sure how to go about this. Most things are date-specific.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)reply
", and the governments of Canada, New Zealand." to ", as well as the governments of Canada and New Zealand".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Tropical Storm Thelma (also known as Tropical Storm Uring in the Philippines) was the deadliest tropical cyclone in Philippine history, killing at least 5,081 people." link to
History of the Philippines.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Outside of Ormoc City, a further 159 people were killed across Leyte and Negros Occidental. " no need for "futher" since you mention it is outside of the city IMO.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"A total of $5.8 million worth of grants and materials was provided collectively in the international relief effort" was to wore here, right?
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"On November 4, both the JTWC and JMA upgraded the system to a tropical storm, with the latter assigning it the name Thelma.[3][4]" link to
tropical cyclone naming.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"The hardest hit region was Leyte where more than 4,000 people lost their lives." comma before "where".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"A total of 598,454 people were affected by the storm across the Philippines.[11] An estimated 43,000 people were left homeless.[12]" mind combing these sentences.
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Altogether, the rains were twice as heavy as the land could handle and the many landslips doubled the volume of fluids.[16]" no need for "the" after "and".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
"Roughly 2,500 people lived on this reclaimed land prior to the flood. The majority of fatalities took place along the banks of the river, with most drowning or being buried in mud or debris." I'd combine this to sentences with something like ";consequentially".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
That would create a misleading statement which would imply that the majority (though somehow less than half) took place along that reclaimed land. Opting not to do this.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)reply
Where does Thelma fall in the deadlist typhoons. There should at least be a template of that.
Our template isn't up-to-snuff. From what I can tell, it's not in the top ten.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)reply
In the aftermath, cut back on the uses of "by [insert date]".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply
Not sure how to go about this. Most things are date-specific.
Cyclonebiskit (
talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)reply
", and the governments of Canada, New Zealand." to ", as well as the governments of Canada and New Zealand".
YEPacificHurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)reply