Hello! I'll be having a gander at this one. Looks like a solid article after an initial read-through, but I do have a few comments that I'll be posting below in a proper review later. Moswentotalky 10:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Thanks very much for doing the review! --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Well, thank you for your prompt and enthusiastic responses! I also appreciated your Google Books result, although I appreciate it may not be appropriate for inclusion in the article. All of the boxes are now ticked, both literally and metaphorically, so I have no hesitation in promoting this to GA. Congratulations, and keep up the good work! Moswentotalky 21:04, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Overall
Overall, the article is very good. It is well-written, with a few minor queries on the text below. It covers the main aspects of the topic well. The lead is an excellent summary, and places the cyclone in context. The sources look reliable and appropriately used, although again I have 2 very minor queries. Both the images are good. No OR, plagiarism or bias (how can you be biased about a cyclone? I suppose it's possible...) Once my queries below are addressed, I'd be happy to promote this. Moswentotalky 10:55, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Lead
"Delfina killed eight people in the country" - This short sentence stood out as being a bit odd. I'm wondering if you could just combine with the previous sentence for: "although the storm destroyed about 3,600 houses and killed eight people"? [a suggestion rather than a necessity]
"Nampula reported 281 mm (11.1 in) in a 48 hour period" - this sounds like journalistic language, the idea of a city reporting something. Perhaps rephrase to something along the lines of the rainfall being recorded in Nampula?
I clarified that it was a station in Nampula. That work? --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
"2,000 2,000 ha" - I assume this is unintentional double vision?
"downed" - this may be a matter of
WP:ENGVAR, but "downed" sounds a bit unencyclopedic to me. I won't argue the point, but something like "brought down" might be better
Is there any information about rebuilding work beyond the transportation infrastructure; or about the timescale for displaced people returning to their homes? This would be nice, but not essential for GA.
Unfortunately, I couldn't find anything, since I did a very thorough search of the storm in newspapers. I also checked in Google books, and got
this amusing result about "Delfina nude on on horseback". In that part of the world, there isn't always long-term aftermath. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
References
FN15 - doesn't specify that it comes from ReliefWeb (unlike other similar references)
FN18 - has the text "via Lexis Nexis (subscription required)", but no hyperlink
There is no hyperlink. Lexis Nexis is a news service. I did a thorough search for info on this storm, but that was one of the few useful news stories. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Hello! I'll be having a gander at this one. Looks like a solid article after an initial read-through, but I do have a few comments that I'll be posting below in a proper review later. Moswentotalky 10:09, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Thanks very much for doing the review! --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Well, thank you for your prompt and enthusiastic responses! I also appreciated your Google Books result, although I appreciate it may not be appropriate for inclusion in the article. All of the boxes are now ticked, both literally and metaphorically, so I have no hesitation in promoting this to GA. Congratulations, and keep up the good work! Moswentotalky 21:04, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Overall
Overall, the article is very good. It is well-written, with a few minor queries on the text below. It covers the main aspects of the topic well. The lead is an excellent summary, and places the cyclone in context. The sources look reliable and appropriately used, although again I have 2 very minor queries. Both the images are good. No OR, plagiarism or bias (how can you be biased about a cyclone? I suppose it's possible...) Once my queries below are addressed, I'd be happy to promote this. Moswentotalky 10:55, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
Lead
"Delfina killed eight people in the country" - This short sentence stood out as being a bit odd. I'm wondering if you could just combine with the previous sentence for: "although the storm destroyed about 3,600 houses and killed eight people"? [a suggestion rather than a necessity]
"Nampula reported 281 mm (11.1 in) in a 48 hour period" - this sounds like journalistic language, the idea of a city reporting something. Perhaps rephrase to something along the lines of the rainfall being recorded in Nampula?
I clarified that it was a station in Nampula. That work? --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
"2,000 2,000 ha" - I assume this is unintentional double vision?
"downed" - this may be a matter of
WP:ENGVAR, but "downed" sounds a bit unencyclopedic to me. I won't argue the point, but something like "brought down" might be better
Is there any information about rebuilding work beyond the transportation infrastructure; or about the timescale for displaced people returning to their homes? This would be nice, but not essential for GA.
Unfortunately, I couldn't find anything, since I did a very thorough search of the storm in newspapers. I also checked in Google books, and got
this amusing result about "Delfina nude on on horseback". In that part of the world, there isn't always long-term aftermath. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply
References
FN15 - doesn't specify that it comes from ReliefWeb (unlike other similar references)
FN18 - has the text "via Lexis Nexis (subscription required)", but no hyperlink
There is no hyperlink. Lexis Nexis is a news service. I did a thorough search for info on this storm, but that was one of the few useful news stories. --♫
Hurricanehink (
talk) 18:06, 21 February 2013 (UTC)reply