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Reviewer: A. C. Santacruz ( talk · contribs) 17:45, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
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From the get-go this article reads very much like a GA, and the list below is mostly a series of comments and suggestions, so DanCherek if you disagree with any point you are more than free to argue. Santacruz ⁂ Please ping me! 18:12, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
He worked on various studies and etchings in the late 19th and early 20th centuries that were precursors to the paintings.I'm not entirely sure how well this fits here how it's currently worded, but I invite you to discuss this point. Artists very frequently do studies and etchings before engaging in actually painting the subject for both brainstorming and material cost reasons, so this is not particularly notable for inclusion in the lead except for how long this stage was. Perhaps that could be emphasized more somehow? On the other hand, it might be a characteristic of a painter to spend extraordinary amounts of time researching or working on a work or series of work, and that could be an interesting detail to raise here. I'm not too familiar with Egusquiza (sadly) to really know, however.
meet the standards of their influential source material.might read better as
meet the high standards set by their widely-acclaimed/influential source material.
@ A. C. Santacruz: Thanks again for all of your comments. I've replied to each of them above, let me know what you think! DanCherek ( talk) 18:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
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From the get-go this article reads very much like a GA, and the list below is mostly a series of comments and suggestions, so DanCherek if you disagree with any point you are more than free to argue. Santacruz ⁂ Please ping me! 18:12, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
He worked on various studies and etchings in the late 19th and early 20th centuries that were precursors to the paintings.I'm not entirely sure how well this fits here how it's currently worded, but I invite you to discuss this point. Artists very frequently do studies and etchings before engaging in actually painting the subject for both brainstorming and material cost reasons, so this is not particularly notable for inclusion in the lead except for how long this stage was. Perhaps that could be emphasized more somehow? On the other hand, it might be a characteristic of a painter to spend extraordinary amounts of time researching or working on a work or series of work, and that could be an interesting detail to raise here. I'm not too familiar with Egusquiza (sadly) to really know, however.
meet the standards of their influential source material.might read better as
meet the high standards set by their widely-acclaimed/influential source material.
@ A. C. Santacruz: Thanks again for all of your comments. I've replied to each of them above, let me know what you think! DanCherek ( talk) 18:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)