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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name ( talk · contribs) 22:01, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
I'll give this a shot. Looks very good already.
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While the two journalists stated that his possible candidacy was "a long shot", he would most likely win that year's Iowa caucuses as a favorite son.I assume they stated both parts? It's worded confusingly.
Going into January 1992, Harkin's fundraising had begun to slow down, and he was polling in the single digits in opinion polls held in New Hampshire. On the other hand, Clinton had continued to grow in popularity and fundraising.Connecting these as "[...] he was polling in the single digits in opinion polls held in New Hampshire, while Clinton had continued to grow in popularity and fundraising" might read better.
Harkin would continue to serve in the Senate until retiring in 2015.It might be better to say "until his retirement in 2015".
Very few issues overall. There's nothing I would object to keeping the same if you really think it's best. This is quite an informative read. An anonymous username, not my real name ( talk) 01:07, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name ( talk · contribs) 22:01, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
I'll give this a shot. Looks very good already.
An anonymous username, not my real name (
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22:01, 9 November 2022 (UTC)
While the two journalists stated that his possible candidacy was "a long shot", he would most likely win that year's Iowa caucuses as a favorite son.I assume they stated both parts? It's worded confusingly.
Going into January 1992, Harkin's fundraising had begun to slow down, and he was polling in the single digits in opinion polls held in New Hampshire. On the other hand, Clinton had continued to grow in popularity and fundraising.Connecting these as "[...] he was polling in the single digits in opinion polls held in New Hampshire, while Clinton had continued to grow in popularity and fundraising" might read better.
Harkin would continue to serve in the Senate until retiring in 2015.It might be better to say "until his retirement in 2015".
Very few issues overall. There's nothing I would object to keeping the same if you really think it's best. This is quite an informative read. An anonymous username, not my real name ( talk) 01:07, 10 November 2022 (UTC)