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This is to open discussion on edits that are deemed needed by some users, but are essentially just delete specific information and data from the article without justification. If something needs to be cleaned up some or re-worded, please discuss here so an agreement can be made on how to relay the information.
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16:31, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
Starting with the first paragraph-- here's the way Dfw79 likes it:
"Toledo Express Airport ( IATA: TOL, ICAO: KTOL, FAA LID: TOL) is a joint civil-military airport located in the townships of Swanton and Monclova situated 10 miles (16 km) to the west of the city of Toledo in Western Lucas County, Ohio, United States. The airport was opened in 1955 as a replacement to then Toledo Municipal Airport located to the southeast of Toledo. TOL is located near the crossing of State Route 2 and Interstate 80/90 ( Ohio Turnpike Exit 52)."
After we delete some useless stuff we have
"Toledo Express Airport ( IATA: TOL, ICAO: KTOL, FAA LID: TOL) is a civil-military airport in Swanton and Monclova townships 10 miles (16 km) west of Toledo in western Lucas County, Ohio, United States. The airport opened in 1955 as a replacement for then Toledo Municipal Airport southeast of Toledo. TOL is near the crossing of State Route 2 and Interstate 80/90 ( Ohio Turnpike Exit 52)."
Dfw79 thinks that doesn't flow well, or something. Anyone else see any reason to prefer his version? Tim Zukas ( talk) 23:57, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
Next paragraph-- his version:
"The airport's main role includes serving commercial passenger, cargo and general aviation aircraft the airport as well as being a base for the Ohio Air National Guard's 180th Fighter Wing with F-16 Fighting Falcon aircraft. The airport is also a considered secondary airport for Detroit, Michigan and the surrounding northwest Ohio and southeast Michigan region. It is frequently used as the primary diversion point for arriving traffic to Detroit Metro Airport as well as other regional hubs. The airport is operated by the Toledo-Lucas County Port Authority on a lease agreement from the City of Toledo."
Now we delete the useless generalities-- the reader doesn't need to be told that airports handle passengers and cargo and general aviation. And more useless verbiage, of course.
"The airport is a base for the Ohio Air National Guard's 180th Fighter Wing with F-16 Fighting Falcons; it is frequently used as a diversion by aircraft arriving Detroit Metro Airport and other hubs. The airport is operated by the Toledo-Lucas County Port Authority on a lease agreement from the city."
So it goes. Anyone who's interested can compare the two versions and wonder at Dfw79's fondness for unneeded words, but you won't find any useful info missing from the short version. (He gave the passenger count for 2012, and said it was 0.9% less than 2011, then he gave the passenger count for 2011. Who needs the latter when you've got the former?) Tim Zukas ( talk) 00:13, 4 August 2013 (UTC)
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This is to open discussion on edits that are deemed needed by some users, but are essentially just delete specific information and data from the article without justification. If something needs to be cleaned up some or re-worded, please discuss here so an agreement can be made on how to relay the information.
Dfw79 (
talk)
16:31, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
Starting with the first paragraph-- here's the way Dfw79 likes it:
"Toledo Express Airport ( IATA: TOL, ICAO: KTOL, FAA LID: TOL) is a joint civil-military airport located in the townships of Swanton and Monclova situated 10 miles (16 km) to the west of the city of Toledo in Western Lucas County, Ohio, United States. The airport was opened in 1955 as a replacement to then Toledo Municipal Airport located to the southeast of Toledo. TOL is located near the crossing of State Route 2 and Interstate 80/90 ( Ohio Turnpike Exit 52)."
After we delete some useless stuff we have
"Toledo Express Airport ( IATA: TOL, ICAO: KTOL, FAA LID: TOL) is a civil-military airport in Swanton and Monclova townships 10 miles (16 km) west of Toledo in western Lucas County, Ohio, United States. The airport opened in 1955 as a replacement for then Toledo Municipal Airport southeast of Toledo. TOL is near the crossing of State Route 2 and Interstate 80/90 ( Ohio Turnpike Exit 52)."
Dfw79 thinks that doesn't flow well, or something. Anyone else see any reason to prefer his version? Tim Zukas ( talk) 23:57, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
Next paragraph-- his version:
"The airport's main role includes serving commercial passenger, cargo and general aviation aircraft the airport as well as being a base for the Ohio Air National Guard's 180th Fighter Wing with F-16 Fighting Falcon aircraft. The airport is also a considered secondary airport for Detroit, Michigan and the surrounding northwest Ohio and southeast Michigan region. It is frequently used as the primary diversion point for arriving traffic to Detroit Metro Airport as well as other regional hubs. The airport is operated by the Toledo-Lucas County Port Authority on a lease agreement from the City of Toledo."
Now we delete the useless generalities-- the reader doesn't need to be told that airports handle passengers and cargo and general aviation. And more useless verbiage, of course.
"The airport is a base for the Ohio Air National Guard's 180th Fighter Wing with F-16 Fighting Falcons; it is frequently used as a diversion by aircraft arriving Detroit Metro Airport and other hubs. The airport is operated by the Toledo-Lucas County Port Authority on a lease agreement from the city."
So it goes. Anyone who's interested can compare the two versions and wonder at Dfw79's fondness for unneeded words, but you won't find any useful info missing from the short version. (He gave the passenger count for 2012, and said it was 0.9% less than 2011, then he gave the passenger count for 2011. Who needs the latter when you've got the former?) Tim Zukas ( talk) 00:13, 4 August 2013 (UTC)