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It contains copyright infringements -
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Throughout the 1990s, Tunstall was arrested several times on misdemeanor charges that ranged from assaulting a police office to driving without a license. He was sentenced to six months’ probation in 1996 for resisting arrest and disorderly conduct charges. A 1999 charge of simple assault was ultimately dismissed.[3] - this has some
WP:BLP issues. We should cite this a bit better. "Simple Assault", is this the name of a crime? I didn't think we actually mentioned crimes that are thrown out per
WP:CRIME. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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Removed the paragraph, which I hope you don't mind. It mostly talks about arrests, not convictions, and although he did get probation at some point, I'm not sure if it's especially relevant. This also helps with the chronology issues that we'll address more later.
He's apparently the first African-American to seek the office, which was a milestone. I moved the paragraph to political life which may make more sense and help with chronology.
Tunstall describes his time in wrestling, where he's better known under the monikers "Tiny the Terrible" and "Little Dougie Tunstall", as "more or less like therapy" - what does this mean? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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Lol, I don't know. He said it though. I removed it because it's confusing. Also rephrased and removed "Little Dougie Tunstall", which he's less known by and derivative of his real name.
In February 2000, he boasted that he could be a star in a major promotion if given the chance, stating: "If Vince McMahon gave me an opportunity to go in front of an audience, I guarantee I'd have a nation screaming my name."[6] Tunstall subsequently made two appearances on WWF/E Raw. On the March 13, 2000 episode of Raw, he appeared as one half of "The Twin Towers", a dwarf duo that Stephanie McMahon joked would face The Rock at WrestleMania 2000.[9][10] He wrestled his only WWE match on the July 25, 2005 episode of Raw under the ring name Cloacas, where he teamed with Viscera to take on Antonio of The Heart Throbs and Pocket Rocket in a winning effort. - this whole bit needs rewording. Why did WWE hire him? Why does it matter what he said (considering he didn't make an impact).
I removed the "boast"ful quote, hopefully that improves the paragraph. Obviously we don't know why WWE brought him in and his interview with the paper probably had nothing to do with it. I think he credits New Jack with getting him on WWE TV, but that's pretty dubious and doesn't belong here either.
In 2020, Tunstall was part of a Dark Side of the Ring episode involving New Jack, in which he recounted the Mass Transit incident.[7] - you mention this earlier, maybe clump this all together. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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contribs)17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Not typically, but it's a quote of his nonetheless.
His platform included opposing same-sex marriage, encouraging NASA to build a base in Pawtucket and giving stipends to those who took in homeless people. - is "platform" a political word? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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contribs)17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
I think I addressed everything but I suspect you'll have a few followups. Thanks for taking his on, it's been awhile since we got to work together!
LM2000 (
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05:29, 27 October 2020 (UTC)reply
GA Review
GA review (see
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here for what they are not)
I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at
WP:GAN and
WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)
Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for
GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
Immediate Failures
It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -
Throughout the 1990s, Tunstall was arrested several times on misdemeanor charges that ranged from assaulting a police office to driving without a license. He was sentenced to six months’ probation in 1996 for resisting arrest and disorderly conduct charges. A 1999 charge of simple assault was ultimately dismissed.[3] - this has some
WP:BLP issues. We should cite this a bit better. "Simple Assault", is this the name of a crime? I didn't think we actually mentioned crimes that are thrown out per
WP:CRIME. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Removed the paragraph, which I hope you don't mind. It mostly talks about arrests, not convictions, and although he did get probation at some point, I'm not sure if it's especially relevant. This also helps with the chronology issues that we'll address more later.
He's apparently the first African-American to seek the office, which was a milestone. I moved the paragraph to political life which may make more sense and help with chronology.
Tunstall describes his time in wrestling, where he's better known under the monikers "Tiny the Terrible" and "Little Dougie Tunstall", as "more or less like therapy" - what does this mean? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Lol, I don't know. He said it though. I removed it because it's confusing. Also rephrased and removed "Little Dougie Tunstall", which he's less known by and derivative of his real name.
In February 2000, he boasted that he could be a star in a major promotion if given the chance, stating: "If Vince McMahon gave me an opportunity to go in front of an audience, I guarantee I'd have a nation screaming my name."[6] Tunstall subsequently made two appearances on WWF/E Raw. On the March 13, 2000 episode of Raw, he appeared as one half of "The Twin Towers", a dwarf duo that Stephanie McMahon joked would face The Rock at WrestleMania 2000.[9][10] He wrestled his only WWE match on the July 25, 2005 episode of Raw under the ring name Cloacas, where he teamed with Viscera to take on Antonio of The Heart Throbs and Pocket Rocket in a winning effort. - this whole bit needs rewording. Why did WWE hire him? Why does it matter what he said (considering he didn't make an impact).
I removed the "boast"ful quote, hopefully that improves the paragraph. Obviously we don't know why WWE brought him in and his interview with the paper probably had nothing to do with it. I think he credits New Jack with getting him on WWE TV, but that's pretty dubious and doesn't belong here either.
In 2020, Tunstall was part of a Dark Side of the Ring episode involving New Jack, in which he recounted the Mass Transit incident.[7] - you mention this earlier, maybe clump this all together. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
Not typically, but it's a quote of his nonetheless.
His platform included opposing same-sex marriage, encouraging NASA to build a base in Pawtucket and giving stipends to those who took in homeless people. - is "platform" a political word? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)reply
I think I addressed everything but I suspect you'll have a few followups. Thanks for taking his on, it's been awhile since we got to work together!
LM2000 (
talk)
05:29, 27 October 2020 (UTC)reply
GA Review
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at
WP:GAN and
WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
talk •
contribs)