was an African American Seventh-day Adventist missionary. Subjects are generally identified by their nationality first thing in the lede and not their ethnic group. Thus in this first sentence he should be identified as simply "American".
En-route he was detained for nine days by the British consul at Chinde, Portuguese Mozambique as he was concerned that a black missionary would cause insubordination among Africans in the colony. The second instance of "he" should be changed to "the consul" so as to avoid confusion.
The SDA agreed to withdraw Booth and Branch after the colonial government raised concerns; Branch's replacement was a white man. Why is it worthy of mention in the lede what the skin color of his replacement was? Perhaps "Branch's replacement was more politically acceptable to the colonial administration."
Thomas H. Branch was born in December 24, 1856, in Jefferson County, Missouri; his parents were both slaves. Link Jefferson County, and also per
WP:Global attach "United States" onto that geographic location. Not all of our readers are going to know where Jefferson County, Missouri is.
Branch, who was considered old for a missionary posting, had been recommended for the mission by the church's Colorado Conference Considered old by who?
Upon arrival at Chinde Branch was detained for nine days by the British consul. Does "detained" mean he was formally arrested, or simply blocked from legally entering the protectorate?
Branch picked up the local language and was well liked by his congregation What local language,
Chewa? Also, I'd be hesitiant to include the claim that he was well-liked by his congregation if that claim is sourced to an SDA publication.
The source doesn't clarify. Both this and the well liked claim come from the Historical Dictionary of Malawi, but it probably doesn't add much and I am happy to remove it if desired -
Dumelow (
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06:49, 10 August 2021 (UTC)reply
If it's sourced to the HD of Malawi its fine by me.
Branch moved to Watts, California as a preacher before the SDA church reluctantly approved a pension for him Any reasons given for the SDA's reluctance?
The source (Williams) says only: "He served in Watts for a short time but then took sustentation, which the new leaders from East Pennsylvania Conference were reluctant to recommend for him." I've tried to expand on this in the article -
Dumelow (
talk)
10:09, 11 August 2021 (UTC)reply
Does the Williams source have page numbers or a chapter?
was an African American Seventh-day Adventist missionary. Subjects are generally identified by their nationality first thing in the lede and not their ethnic group. Thus in this first sentence he should be identified as simply "American".
En-route he was detained for nine days by the British consul at Chinde, Portuguese Mozambique as he was concerned that a black missionary would cause insubordination among Africans in the colony. The second instance of "he" should be changed to "the consul" so as to avoid confusion.
The SDA agreed to withdraw Booth and Branch after the colonial government raised concerns; Branch's replacement was a white man. Why is it worthy of mention in the lede what the skin color of his replacement was? Perhaps "Branch's replacement was more politically acceptable to the colonial administration."
Thomas H. Branch was born in December 24, 1856, in Jefferson County, Missouri; his parents were both slaves. Link Jefferson County, and also per
WP:Global attach "United States" onto that geographic location. Not all of our readers are going to know where Jefferson County, Missouri is.
Branch, who was considered old for a missionary posting, had been recommended for the mission by the church's Colorado Conference Considered old by who?
Upon arrival at Chinde Branch was detained for nine days by the British consul. Does "detained" mean he was formally arrested, or simply blocked from legally entering the protectorate?
Branch picked up the local language and was well liked by his congregation What local language,
Chewa? Also, I'd be hesitiant to include the claim that he was well-liked by his congregation if that claim is sourced to an SDA publication.
The source doesn't clarify. Both this and the well liked claim come from the Historical Dictionary of Malawi, but it probably doesn't add much and I am happy to remove it if desired -
Dumelow (
talk)
06:49, 10 August 2021 (UTC)reply
If it's sourced to the HD of Malawi its fine by me.
Branch moved to Watts, California as a preacher before the SDA church reluctantly approved a pension for him Any reasons given for the SDA's reluctance?
The source (Williams) says only: "He served in Watts for a short time but then took sustentation, which the new leaders from East Pennsylvania Conference were reluctant to recommend for him." I've tried to expand on this in the article -
Dumelow (
talk)
10:09, 11 August 2021 (UTC)reply
Does the Williams source have page numbers or a chapter?