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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld ( talk · contribs) 14:35, 14 October 2015 (UTC)
May take up to five days.♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:35, 14 October 2015 (UTC)
Reading now.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:18, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Copyedited myself
"The album received positive reviews from critics.[18] The songs "Pazham Neeyappa", "Oru Naal Podhuma", "Isai Thamizh" and "Paattum Naane" still remain popular among the Tamil diaspora.[18] Film historian Randor Guy stated in his 1997 book Starlight, Starbright: The Early Tamil Cinema that "Pazham Neeyappa", performed by Sundarambal, "became the favourite of millions".[38] Film producer and writer G. Dhananjayan called the songs "evergreen" and stated that they contributed to the film's success.[39] Meera Ramanathan of Behindwoods praised T. M. Soundararajan's singing in "Paattum Naane", saying: "The pronunciations, pitch and tone is perfect and for a moment we think that the almighty would sing with the same booming modulations."[40] On "Oru Naal Podhuma", another writer from the same website, Rekhs, said, "What's special about this song is the garland of ragas intertwined by the lyricist and the composer enchantingly, sung mellifluously by Dr Balamuralikrishna".[41] On "Vaasi Vaasi", which is based on the Neelambari raga, singer Charulatha Mani, writing for The Hindu, said it was: "a pure and pristine depiction of the raga in the ringing voice of K. B. Sundarambal".[42] Mani also praised M. Balamuralikrishna's rendition of "Oru Naal Podhuma".[28][29][43] Mana Baskaran of The Hindu Tamil described the album as: "an attractive package for all to listen to."[44" -I find this section a bit rambling and repetitive. I think you could remove a review or two or restructure in a way which flows better for the reader.
Something like:
"The album received positive reviews from critics, and the songs "Pazham Neeyappa", "Oru Naal Podhuma", "Isai Thamizh" and "Paattum Naane" still remain popular among the Tamil diaspora. The Film historian Randor Guy identifies "Pazham Neeyappa" in particular, performed by Sundarambal, as the "favourite of millions". Meera Ramanathan of Behindwoods was enthusiastic towards T. M. Soundararajan's treatment of "Paattum Naane", considering his pronunciations, pitch and tone to have reached perfection. The singer Charulatha Mani, writing for The Hindu, believed that K. B. Sundarambal had produced a "pure and pristine depiction" of the Neelambari raga in "Vaasi Vaasi", and expressed approval of M. Balamuralikrishna's rendition of "Oru Naal Podhuma". Mana Baskaran of The Hindu Tamil described the album as: "an attractive package for all to listen to."
I think that sort of thing needs doing throughout reception and legacy sections. Find a way to make it look more stylish and balanced, so it flows better.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:28, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Definitely overcooked this. Masses of it. It's too much. It looks more like a tribute. I'd chop it by a good half and merge into one section. The length I think should be about three paragraphs, similar to the length of the Legacy section. A possibility is creating a sub article on Influence of Thiruvilaiyadal and condense to a summary but I think people might question it's neutrality and legitimacy as an article and it wouldn't last long.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:02, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Overall I think we need to dial down on the sheer number of review comments and praise throughout. It's a pity there isn't more info available on production and themes given that it's a devotional epic of renown in India, but I can understand that.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:08, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Much much better, though I'm not sure how long the new article will last in its own right. I don't see why landmark/influential films in a given cinema industry shouldn't have such articles but they really need to be very well done with scholarly material I think to stick.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:35, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
I've given the critical reception section a copyedit. The production could do with sharpening up a bit before I'm ready to pass too.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:48, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Perhaps User:Ssven2 can relay what I said about it after seeing it. I think I said I liked the comic scenes in the palace and the Kailash setting at the beginning with the fruit.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:52, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
@ Dr. Blofeld: Anything more to change, Dr. Blofeld? :) Thamizhan1994 ( Appo Pesu) 10:44, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
What do you mean by Oru Kanniyum Moonu Kalavaanikalum (2014), compares how the gods summon a touchscreen on which the faces of various humans appear like icons that are used on mobile apps, to the way Shiva plays his divine games by intervening in human affairs in Thiruvilaiyadal. I don't quite follow what you're trying to at here? Do you mean Oru Kanniyum Moonu Kalavaanikalum (2014) likens the way Shiva plays his divine games by intervening in human affairs in Thiruvilaiyadal to the use of touchscreen human face icons on mobile apps?♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:10, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Much improved, good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:21, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
Keep up the great work, look forward to reviewing the next one. Any idea what that might be?♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:26, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
That would be good, Ssven has been on to me about watching that which I'll get around to by the time you're written it!♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:31, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld ( talk · contribs) 14:35, 14 October 2015 (UTC)
May take up to five days.♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:35, 14 October 2015 (UTC)
Reading now.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:18, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Copyedited myself
"The album received positive reviews from critics.[18] The songs "Pazham Neeyappa", "Oru Naal Podhuma", "Isai Thamizh" and "Paattum Naane" still remain popular among the Tamil diaspora.[18] Film historian Randor Guy stated in his 1997 book Starlight, Starbright: The Early Tamil Cinema that "Pazham Neeyappa", performed by Sundarambal, "became the favourite of millions".[38] Film producer and writer G. Dhananjayan called the songs "evergreen" and stated that they contributed to the film's success.[39] Meera Ramanathan of Behindwoods praised T. M. Soundararajan's singing in "Paattum Naane", saying: "The pronunciations, pitch and tone is perfect and for a moment we think that the almighty would sing with the same booming modulations."[40] On "Oru Naal Podhuma", another writer from the same website, Rekhs, said, "What's special about this song is the garland of ragas intertwined by the lyricist and the composer enchantingly, sung mellifluously by Dr Balamuralikrishna".[41] On "Vaasi Vaasi", which is based on the Neelambari raga, singer Charulatha Mani, writing for The Hindu, said it was: "a pure and pristine depiction of the raga in the ringing voice of K. B. Sundarambal".[42] Mani also praised M. Balamuralikrishna's rendition of "Oru Naal Podhuma".[28][29][43] Mana Baskaran of The Hindu Tamil described the album as: "an attractive package for all to listen to."[44" -I find this section a bit rambling and repetitive. I think you could remove a review or two or restructure in a way which flows better for the reader.
Something like:
"The album received positive reviews from critics, and the songs "Pazham Neeyappa", "Oru Naal Podhuma", "Isai Thamizh" and "Paattum Naane" still remain popular among the Tamil diaspora. The Film historian Randor Guy identifies "Pazham Neeyappa" in particular, performed by Sundarambal, as the "favourite of millions". Meera Ramanathan of Behindwoods was enthusiastic towards T. M. Soundararajan's treatment of "Paattum Naane", considering his pronunciations, pitch and tone to have reached perfection. The singer Charulatha Mani, writing for The Hindu, believed that K. B. Sundarambal had produced a "pure and pristine depiction" of the Neelambari raga in "Vaasi Vaasi", and expressed approval of M. Balamuralikrishna's rendition of "Oru Naal Podhuma". Mana Baskaran of The Hindu Tamil described the album as: "an attractive package for all to listen to."
I think that sort of thing needs doing throughout reception and legacy sections. Find a way to make it look more stylish and balanced, so it flows better.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:28, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Definitely overcooked this. Masses of it. It's too much. It looks more like a tribute. I'd chop it by a good half and merge into one section. The length I think should be about three paragraphs, similar to the length of the Legacy section. A possibility is creating a sub article on Influence of Thiruvilaiyadal and condense to a summary but I think people might question it's neutrality and legitimacy as an article and it wouldn't last long.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:02, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Overall I think we need to dial down on the sheer number of review comments and praise throughout. It's a pity there isn't more info available on production and themes given that it's a devotional epic of renown in India, but I can understand that.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:08, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Much much better, though I'm not sure how long the new article will last in its own right. I don't see why landmark/influential films in a given cinema industry shouldn't have such articles but they really need to be very well done with scholarly material I think to stick.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:35, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
I've given the critical reception section a copyedit. The production could do with sharpening up a bit before I'm ready to pass too.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:48, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
Perhaps User:Ssven2 can relay what I said about it after seeing it. I think I said I liked the comic scenes in the palace and the Kailash setting at the beginning with the fruit.♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:52, 15 October 2015 (UTC)
@ Dr. Blofeld: Anything more to change, Dr. Blofeld? :) Thamizhan1994 ( Appo Pesu) 10:44, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
What do you mean by Oru Kanniyum Moonu Kalavaanikalum (2014), compares how the gods summon a touchscreen on which the faces of various humans appear like icons that are used on mobile apps, to the way Shiva plays his divine games by intervening in human affairs in Thiruvilaiyadal. I don't quite follow what you're trying to at here? Do you mean Oru Kanniyum Moonu Kalavaanikalum (2014) likens the way Shiva plays his divine games by intervening in human affairs in Thiruvilaiyadal to the use of touchscreen human face icons on mobile apps?♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:10, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
Much improved, good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:21, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
Keep up the great work, look forward to reviewing the next one. Any idea what that might be?♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:26, 16 October 2015 (UTC)
That would be good, Ssven has been on to me about watching that which I'll get around to by the time you're written it!♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:31, 16 October 2015 (UTC)