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Reviewer: Mujinga ( talk · contribs) 23:14, 24 August 2023 (UTC) reply

• Hi I'll take this on for review as part of the August 2023 GAN Backlog Drive Mujinga ( talk)

  Hi @ Bremps: looks like this can be a GA with a few improvements, I'll put the article on hold for you to address the comments below. I'm fine with extending the traditional seven days as long as we are in communication about it, cheers Mujinga ( talk) 00:15, 25 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Hello, thanks for reviewing my nom. I'll be addressing the issues within the seven day timespan. @ Mujinga Bremps ... 00:49, 25 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  I implemented most of the suggestions. I chose "Burmese" since that is the demonym I saw in the sources, and can change it to Myanma if you would like. Can you please clarify what the following suggestion means? @ Mujinga Bremps ... 15:08, 25 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  • "Frequent doxing by pro-junta accounts posed a significant security risk; she frequently switched hiding places " 2xfrequent, suggest changing one

  Bremps ... 15:08, 25 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Hi @ Bremps re 2xfrequent I meant the prose has "frequent doxing .. frequently switched" so I was asking you to change one instance to "often" or whatever works. Can you mark what you have replied to and what you haven't so we can see what else is left please? Re Burmese vs Myanma perhaps it's best to check at WP:MYANMAR? Cheers, Mujinga ( talk) 08:18, 26 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Hi @ Mujinga,

  I implemented every suggestion you have made save for the one on Burmese/Myanma; I am asking for advice on that one at Wikipedia:Help desk.

  Thanks,

  Bremps Bremps ... 03:06, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  ===prose===

  • "In 2018, she, along with 16 other activists, " - better "Thinzar Shunlei Yi" not "she"
  • "and she was convicted in 2020" - this suggests to me a custodial sentence, but there's no news of her then being released so what was the sentence?
  • "Frequent doxing by pro-junta accounts posed a significant security risk; she frequently switched hiding places " 2xfrequent, suggest changing one
  • "took refuge in Thailand in Summer 2022" - summer?
  • " In 2016 .. In 2019 .. In 2022" make less of a list?
  • lead: why " 2021 Burmese coup d'état" if it links to 2021 Myanmar coup d'état and why called her burmese not myanma? i'm genuinely interested, it seems quite controversial after reading Names of Myanmar
  • Lead: " She lives in exile in Thailand as of 2022, and runs the #Sisters2Sisters anti-sexual violence campaign." - now we are 2023, has anything changed? maybe link Wartime sexual violence as it is below
  • lead: could add soemthing about awards
  • infobox: "Known for Anti-Tatmadaw activism, organizing Myanmar anti-junta protests, mental health activism, feminist activism" - ok but feminism only mentioned hera and no mention of the television show?

  Bremps ... 03:08, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  cool thanks for the reply, yes I see the question at Wikipedia:Help_desk#Burmese_or_Myanma? Mujinga ( talk) 11:38, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  @ Bremps in addition the extra photo is good and I've marked the query about pulling the structure (including the lead) into paragraphs as not done yet Mujinga ( talk) 11:49, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  @ Bremps Ok everything is fine for me now except the Burmese/Myanma thing. It doesn't seem logical to me to describe the 2021 Myanmar coup d'état as the 2021 Burmese coup d'état and I just like the article to be consistent. Happy to wait for more answers or to discuss further here, this is the one issue left for me (unless there are further improvements I'd need to evaluate). Thanks, Mujinga ( talk) 21:37, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  (chekcing in) cool let's see if we get an answer on this Mujinga ( talk) 13:42, 29 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Hi @ Mujinga,

  I think "Burmese" works best. That was what I got at the Help Desk (even though only one person replied) and that is the demonym used at Myanmar.

  Thanks,

  Bremps Bremps ... 19:34, 29 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  FYI I linked 2021 Myanmar coup d'état as 2021 Burmese coup d'état for consistency. Bremps ... 19:42, 29 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Sure that works, thanks for your patience on this tricky issue. I see you have made an effort to be consistent and so I'm happy to make this a GA now. Mujinga ( talk) 19:54, 29 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Thank you very much for your patience and advice, @ Mujinga! Bremps ... 20:05, 29 August 2023 (UTC) reply

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

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spotchecks and referencing

On this version:

• 8: As a teenager, she was sexually assaulted by a tutor. She experienced clinical depression, and attributed the incident to karma for her actions in a past life at the time - ok
• 11, 12: In 2018, she, along with 16 other activists, including poet Maung Saung Kha, were charged with unlawful protest for organizing solidarity protests for internally displaced persons in Kachin State and against the Rohingya genocide - ok
• 12: Her trials lasted for two years, and she was convicted in 2020 - source says "She faced trials for 2 years and was convicted in 2020" - so that's too close, please rephrase

   Done Mujinga ( talk) 11:45, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

• 13, 17: During this time, she was frequently harassed online, and was doxed on pornographic sites - backed by sources
• 19, 18: Mizzima TV's license was revoked by the military in the wake of the 2021 coup, and the programme's status post-coup is unclear - backed by sources
• references are well laid-out and reliable sources

images

• images are relevant and appropriately licensed
• new image also fine Mujinga ( talk) 11:39, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply
• uploaded media also fine Mujinga ( talk) 21:24, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

article status

• article is neutral and stable, broad and focused
• the sections are good but within every section paragraphs could be pullled into one paragraph, including lead

   Not done Mujinga ( talk) 11:48, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Hello @ Mujinga,

  if I am understanding you correctly, do you mean every section should have one paragraph? That might make those paragraphs too long.

  Thanks,

  Bremps Bremps ... 17:31, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  I went ahead and did so, though. Bremps ... 18:10, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  I meant pull into paragraphs generally, but I liek what you did and made the "2021–present: Post-coup d'etat" into two paragprahs, see what you think. I also made an edit for tense and an edit for wikilinking more clearly, again see what you think Mujinga ( talk) 21:21, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

   Done but feel free to adjust Mujinga ( talk) 21:26, 27 August 2023 (UTC) reply

  Thanks, it works better with the separation. Bremps ... 02:53, 28 August 2023 (UTC) reply

prose

• "In 2018, she, along with 16 other activists, " - better "Thinzar Shunlei Yi" not "she"
• "and she was convicted in 2020" - this suggests to me a custodial sentence, but there's no news of her then being released so what was the sentence?
• "Frequent doxing by pro-junta accounts posed a significant security risk; she frequently switched hiding places " 2xfrequent, suggest changing one
• "took refuge in Thailand in Summer 2022" - summer?
• " In 2016 .. In 2019 .. In 2022" make less of a list?
• lead: why " 2021 Burmese coup d'état" if it links to 2021 Myanmar coup d'état and why called her burmese not myanma? i'm genuinely interested, it seems quite controversial after reading Names of Myanmar
• Lead: " She lives in exile in Thailand as of 2022, and runs the #Sisters2Sisters anti-sexual violence campaign." - now we are 2023, has anything changed? maybe link Wartime sexual violence as it is below
• lead: could add soemthing about awards
• infobox: "Known for Anti-Tatmadaw activism, organizing Myanmar anti-junta protests, mental health activism, feminist activism" - ok but feminism only mentioned hera and no mention of the television show?