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Reviewer: Aaron north ( talk) 06:16, 10 October 2010 (UTC)
This is an impressive article which has had a lot of work put into it. However, it also has several issues that would need to be corrected. This article really needs a thorough copy-edit and perhaps a peer review. I have corrected a few sentences, but the problems remaining are too numerous to list. There are also a lot of problems with word choice, particularly editorializing and unattributed "peacock" and "weasel" words. I did enjoy reading the article and recognize all the effort that went into it, but unfortunately this article simply is not close enough for me to hold it.
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01:08, 11 October 2010 (UTC)
Seriously though Aaron, it could have been easily improved within the week, especially if two or three of us were copying editing. I strongly suggest you reopen this nomination as you haven't given us a chance to address what you think is problematic.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:31, 11 October 2010 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Aaron north ( talk) 06:16, 10 October 2010 (UTC)
This is an impressive article which has had a lot of work put into it. However, it also has several issues that would need to be corrected. This article really needs a thorough copy-edit and perhaps a peer review. I have corrected a few sentences, but the problems remaining are too numerous to list. There are also a lot of problems with word choice, particularly editorializing and unattributed "peacock" and "weasel" words. I did enjoy reading the article and recognize all the effort that went into it, but unfortunately this article simply is not close enough for me to hold it.
Aaron north (
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01:08, 11 October 2010 (UTC)
Seriously though Aaron, it could have been easily improved within the week, especially if two or three of us were copying editing. I strongly suggest you reopen this nomination as you haven't given us a chance to address what you think is problematic.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:31, 11 October 2010 (UTC)