I know
WP:LEAD suggests a lead of three or four paragraphs per the size of this article, but given quite a bit of the article is taken up by the "Medals" table. I would suggest still three paragraphs but trim down some of the information in the lead.
"2nd ASEAN ParaGames" Was this the official name with the use of 2nd? If not, it should be Second or second as per
WP:MOSNUM. Ditto with the 3rd and 4th.
"In April, she participated in the US Paralympics Trials in Minneapolis." How come she competed in the US Paralympics Trials?
Comment: Good question. From the sources, it seems that you don't have to be American to take part in the US Paralympics Trials. I can't find anything specific which explains this, but perhaps they are international Paralympics trials held in the USA which are open to people of all nationalities to enable them to qualify for the Paralympic Games. —
JackLee,
13:20, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
No worries. If you can find any more info, bare this in mind to either add a footnote to explain this, or some additional text.
Peanut4 (
talk)
13:27, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
Medals
How come some of the dates are just years or months & years?
It's overall pretty good and I'll put it on hold for now. I will also give a fuller review of the lead when you've had chance to respond or make some changes.
Peanut4 (
talk)
21:07, 1 October 2008 (UTC)reply
Another well written GA from you. Meets the GA criteria. Would be good to get an image and bare in mind the one point above about the US trials. Good luck with any future expansion of the article.
Peanut4 (
talk)
15:53, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
I've e-mailed the Singapore Sports Council about an image; let's hope for a positive response. Anyway, thanks again for all your help! — Cheers,
JackLee–
talk–16:47, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
I know
WP:LEAD suggests a lead of three or four paragraphs per the size of this article, but given quite a bit of the article is taken up by the "Medals" table. I would suggest still three paragraphs but trim down some of the information in the lead.
"2nd ASEAN ParaGames" Was this the official name with the use of 2nd? If not, it should be Second or second as per
WP:MOSNUM. Ditto with the 3rd and 4th.
"In April, she participated in the US Paralympics Trials in Minneapolis." How come she competed in the US Paralympics Trials?
Comment: Good question. From the sources, it seems that you don't have to be American to take part in the US Paralympics Trials. I can't find anything specific which explains this, but perhaps they are international Paralympics trials held in the USA which are open to people of all nationalities to enable them to qualify for the Paralympic Games. —
JackLee,
13:20, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
No worries. If you can find any more info, bare this in mind to either add a footnote to explain this, or some additional text.
Peanut4 (
talk)
13:27, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
Medals
How come some of the dates are just years or months & years?
It's overall pretty good and I'll put it on hold for now. I will also give a fuller review of the lead when you've had chance to respond or make some changes.
Peanut4 (
talk)
21:07, 1 October 2008 (UTC)reply
Another well written GA from you. Meets the GA criteria. Would be good to get an image and bare in mind the one point above about the US trials. Good luck with any future expansion of the article.
Peanut4 (
talk)
15:53, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply
I've e-mailed the Singapore Sports Council about an image; let's hope for a positive response. Anyway, thanks again for all your help! — Cheers,
JackLee–
talk–16:47, 2 October 2008 (UTC)reply