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Reviewer: Wizardman 23:34, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
Hey. To start off with, I'm concerned about the structure of this article in general. The way it's split feels rather odd for a bio article. It starts off by pointing out different aspects of what he's done (reforestation, etc.) However, there's no chronology to it, especially considering that early life is near the end.
What I could do is read it through, and if it makes sense despite this, then I'll continue. Otherwise, it's a possible fail as is. For a start, at least move early life first. Wizardman 23:34, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
It's a very nice article, but the citation issues combined with the structure lead me to fail the article. What I would do is fix these issues, put the article up for a peer review, then bring it back to GAN; it should pass fairly easily at that point. (IMO cite adding is a lot easier to do than prose issues, and your prose is perfectly fine) Wizardman 17:27, 1 November 2009 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Wizardman 23:34, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
Hey. To start off with, I'm concerned about the structure of this article in general. The way it's split feels rather odd for a bio article. It starts off by pointing out different aspects of what he's done (reforestation, etc.) However, there's no chronology to it, especially considering that early life is near the end.
What I could do is read it through, and if it makes sense despite this, then I'll continue. Otherwise, it's a possible fail as is. For a start, at least move early life first. Wizardman 23:34, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
It's a very nice article, but the citation issues combined with the structure lead me to fail the article. What I would do is fix these issues, put the article up for a peer review, then bring it back to GAN; it should pass fairly easily at that point. (IMO cite adding is a lot easier to do than prose issues, and your prose is perfectly fine) Wizardman 17:27, 1 November 2009 (UTC)